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Submission Name: noone has it dots

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Author:	namesdontmatter
Elite Ratio:	3.06 - 62/89/29
Words:	149

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	707
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
a whiny little brat poem

noone has it dots

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finally realizing the world isnt a cookie
and destiny is another word
for bad things that are gonna happen
i still cant get used to this

i dont want to be cynical or angry
and i cant stand pain
all the sad faces make me want to scream

why cant we just be happy
when did life become another job
just something to put up with

i want some more candy
but all of a sudden
everything i want is bad for me
but with how horrible the world is
what am i saving myself from

click on cartoons
but its replaced with the news of all the other people suffering
order up: guilt trip
make me feel bad for caring about me

problems still unsolved
the world still unsaved
me still ungrateful for what i have
because i want so much more

Submitted on 2005-12-10 13:25:51 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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well, we all eventually realize that the world/life is no picnic, and it can be a very painful thing to understand. on the other hand, we mustn't forget that there are things worth living for, and even things worth dying for.
sorry for the rant, but your poem is really quite eloquent in a surprised, wonder-eyed sort of way.
writing is a good way to come to terms with things, so keep at it.

nice work!
| Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]

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