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    dots Submission Name: noone has itdots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       a whiny little brat poem


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    finally realizing the world isnt a cookie
    and destiny is another word
    for bad things that are gonna happen
    i still cant get used to this

    i dont want to be cynical or angry
    and i cant stand pain
    all the sad faces make me want to scream

    why cant we just be happy
    when did life become another job
    just something to put up with

    i want some more candy
    but all of a sudden
    everything i want is bad for me
    but with how horrible the world is
    what am i saving myself from

    click on cartoons
    but its replaced with the news of all the other people suffering
    order up: guilt trip
    make me feel bad for caring about me

    problems still unsolved
    the world still unsaved
    me still ungrateful for what i have
    because i want so much more




    Submitted on 2005-12-10 13:25:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, we all eventually realize that the world/life is no picnic, and it can be a very painful thing to understand. on the other hand, we mustn't forget that there are things worth living for, and even things worth dying for.
    sorry for the rant, but your poem is really quite eloquent in a surprised, wonder-eyed sort of way.
    writing is a good way to come to terms with things, so keep at it.

    nice work!
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]


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