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    dots Submission Name: Rain (revised)dots
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    Author: LadyChaos
    ASL Info:    19/F/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 718/606/95
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsRain (revised)dots
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    There’s nothing like the rain.
    I can’t help but lose myself
    In the myriad of mist and shadow,
    As I watch it cleanse the world.

    A sad smile tugs at my lips, and
    My head fills with wishful thoughts
    Of the rain cleansing me
    Of a grime that no bath can take away

    I wonder if anyone understands
    why I like the rain...
    I wonder if anyone comprehends
    why I like the pain...

    I wonder if anyone even cares,
    that my life seems like its been taped.
    Maybe things could be different
    if I had never gotten raped
    but it’s too late--

    I can't change the past
    All I can do is make the present last
    And hope
    That there’s still hope for me in the future

    The rain is pure
    Like I can never be
    No matter how many times
    I feel its pitter-patter on my skin

    That’s why I love it
    because in it I can hide my tears
    That’s why I like the pain
    It’s the only thing still real.





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      This a powerful piece. It speaks from the heart and really conveys itself to the reader. How can anyone read this and not be touched in some way? That is the mark of a great poem. The imagery of tears being hidden by the rain is particularly beautiful.

    Very well done. Commendable.
    | Posted on 2004-05-04 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      liked your poem cause i LOVE the rain it make me feel happy and oh i caunt explain its to wierd good write
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by kellz | [ Reply to This ]
      This makes me very emotional. i have had friends and even family that have been raped, if this is what you mean in the poem, and if i knew who it was that did it thay would be dead right know. i cant help but feel a deep sorrow for you. you have expressed how you feel wonderfully in this poem. i like it.
    The rain is pure
    Like I can never be
    No matter how many times
    I feel its pitter-patter on my skin

    This is my favorite part. if im wrong about the meaning please tell me.
    ad you are always pure, as long as there is still love in your heart for others. and as long as you have that there is also still a chance.
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by melancholypoet | [ Reply to This ]
      very powerful poem or i may say it's a statement within the poem.i will never be able to imagine what u went thru,but i know it must be awfull.
    great write,keep ur thoughts connected to ur feelings and fight back.
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by bilal anaim | [ Reply to This ]
      seems at first to be something quieter than is actually is. One line in particular hits hard and resonates. Very emotional read, but the hind sight is awesome.
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Casper | [ Reply to This ]



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