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    dots Submission Name: My Pendots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Pendots

    My pen
    bleeds onto paper
    just like
    my frail soul.

    Submitted on 2004-01-16 14:14:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was just telling someone about how some of the best works are compressed. I really love this piece. There is so much depth. The words "My pen bleeds" are so powerful.
    And I like L sounds in "like my frail soul". Thanx for suggesting me to read this.
    | Posted on 2004-04-17 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm... slightly eerie image, but I like it... rather Poe-esque, ie "The Tell-Tale Heart". Nicely done! *shivers* <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-21 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      short and nice i know where you are coming from. Any writer knows yet you simply put it on paper to understand yourself better that's a wonderful thing
    | Posted on 2004-01-25 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      I am really becoming a fan. You are great with these short ones!! So much said in so few words. No need to add any more.
    | Posted on 2004-01-18 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      You make me visualise a pen with dark red ink bleeding through the sheets, and you, too, through the bedsheets. Oops, am I getting into horror? Nice one.
    | Posted on 2004-01-17 00:00:00 | by hopefloats | [ Reply to This ]
      good similie. and its breivity adds to its complexity. i like it alot
    | Posted on 2004-01-16 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]

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