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    dots Submission Name: ~Sacrifice of a broken heart~dots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 246
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1606



    Description:
       ok,this song might not make sence or it might seem like it was written with a higher level of thought.--Either way,i wrote it while a little drowsy from some medicine i took.
    so just tell me what you think.its unspecified so comment in anyway you'd like.


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    dots~Sacrifice of a broken heart~dots
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    ~`~`~Sacrifice of a broken heart~`~`~

    Trembling inside,
    from fear of sacrifice
    but knowing,it has to be done
    just takes away the pain & makes it feel numb.
    ~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~
    Searching for faith,
    looking to take away the blame
    & knowing,it has to be done
    throws out belief & the numbness overcomes.
    ~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~
    Pre-Chorus:
    This will be my sacrifice,
    This is my try to make things right.
    This will be my sacrifice,
    my chance to fake a dying smile.

    Chorus-
    give it all,blow me away.
    Sacrifice again my broken heart.
    Give it out,cut me off.
    this is,anyway,
    a sacrifice of a broken heart.
    oh...la la la la(aa)
    ~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~
    the cold,
    too much to take alone.
    it feels,nothing belongs
    the hurt of being broken seems like its gone
    but the fire building inside
    still says it has to be done.
    ~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~
    lost & forgotten,
    but not left for dead,
    all of useless thoughts, want to go insane.
    the life still broken,wrapped up in tape.
    the feeling of fixed has just, flown away.
    ~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~
    (Pre-Chorus)_ _ _ _CHORUS_ _ _ _
    --~--Bridge--~--
    Sacrifices---never easy,
    Sacrifices---leave a terrible feeling
    Sacrifices---fix what has been broken
    but sacrifices---
    also leave with a death-toned silence
    ~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~`~




    Submitted on 2005-12-10 16:59:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love the picture!
    i guess u could say it goes along with the song.
    the subject feels so sensative and ithink you captured a little saddness along with it.

    "Searching for faith,
    looking to take away the blame
    & knowing,it has to be done
    throws out belief & the numbness overcomes"

    "lost & forgotten,
    but not left for dead,
    all of useless thoughts, want to go insane.
    the life still broken,wrapped up in tape.
    the feeling of fixed has just, flown away"

    i loved those lines and i think i just love the whole song...
    plz dont see me as sucking up..lol.
    overall,i think you can tell that i liked this alot.

    -(fake)
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by (fake_sanity) | [ Reply to This ]
      This really was beautiful...the meaning made up for lack of super-poem like sensation lol. I would love to hear this one sung though I must say that just reading it gives a good idea of what it "should" or might sound like. great write..i really enjoyed it...hope more ppl comment. This is a favs add.
    peace.
    ~silent
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was beautiful. it didn't make any outward "sense", but I felt that the real meaning was there and it was so touchingly sad.
    I would really love to hear from you if you have any other thoughts about this that you wouldn't mind sharing.

    really wonderful.
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]



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