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    dots Submission Name: Wind of Lovedots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1045
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       Then came the sound of a might rushing wind...


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    dotsWind of Lovedots
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    This wind never whispers,
    it howls and growls its challenge.
    Would you dare dance?

    All that is real is rustling with the passing.

    It presses close to feel the fleshy firmness of your form
    and without permission penetrates your private places
    Would you dare dance?

    It is self-important, impatient, impolite but pointedly passionate.

    If you are uneasy or become queasy being spun,
    if you detest a mess or will not be unkempt
    dare not dance this dance.

    Crawl into a hole until the wind of love has passed.




    Submitted on 2005-12-10 19:03:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah who amongst us will brave loves tempest and die like men!

    I love this, too many people wimp out of love. It's lifted me, it's dumped me, it's a pointless life without it.

    Great work!
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      That is really awesome, well-written peice of art and I'm not going to say anything more because my fellow writers have said everything that your poem deserves and I really like the idea and liked the last line. Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice. Nice idea, nice execution.

    The provocation to the reader is good, quite unusual, to dare them to dance, and your descriptions have just enough wickedness peeping from under the covers to tempt one to jump into bed to find out.

    Excellent poem, well done

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your words capture well what your saying although I dare say you're talking about flowering(for want of a better word) love with the mess of lust and other such stuff that goes with it and can often burn out quickly as opposed to seasoned love as it is, that turns into something alot more...passive. I hope that makes sense anyway. I enjoyed reading this, it was well structured and your discriptions where quite catching.

    TTFN
    V
    TTFN
    V
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      I would most definitely dance! You have captured the passion of love in this write.. and the whirlwind spin it puts one in. Love is both patient and impatient..and can leave one feeling dizzy, yet grounded. I like the sensual, erratic feeling when I read this.. and the many facets of love that are entwined within the lines of this short, yet powerful write.
    Just wonderful.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is magical in it's portrayal, no onther way to do it but dive in first. But is there a chance to be inspired after the romance is gone, that would be my longing defined.

    The edge of life is a place of profound mystery, love is a cut above the rest and the heart is a jewel

    beautiful,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      ***********APPLAUSE****************


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    this is by far the most clever written poem i have EVER read about love. describes the feeling and emotions that love takes your thru so perfectectly...

    SO SO SO SO GOOOOOOOD*

    *keep spreading the love*
    nadia
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is so very clever, powerful and passionate, seemingly spontaneous, yet full of alliteration and rhymes. … real poetic craftsmanship.
    the whole poem is kind of challenging…do we dare to dance?
    or miss out hiding in a hole …
    ''I dunno ''
    is my cowardly answer

    but I do know about the poem
    I like it very much…the form and the contents
    and another great metaphor from you

    This wind is truly not for cowards …..
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by ertha | [ Reply to This ]
      Woah!
    Reckless in a way that it seemed so natural yet so fought against. Like the wind, ya know? Neat.
    Like crying for that 'wind' to come and sweep you away, but when it does, you try to stand against it...rather than let it sweep you away? Is it just me or is love so powerful that it sends everyone crawling?
    AAAhhhh, well...just my thoughts on this write of yours!
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I really enjoyed reading this poem. It has so much meaning. I totally agree with Cat's comment, we should never crawl into a hole and hide from the wind of love. Love is a tricky feeling, but if you never dare to feel this wind, you're just not alive.
    Great writting! ;)
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by rachel gless | [ Reply to This ]
      ah, the winds of love... they are a part of the
    seasons of real love. i would dance the dance
    always, spinning and blowing my hair unkempt...
    the winter of love can be harsh and cold,
    but the invincible summer lives deep in the soil and
    withstands the storms.

    i really enjoyed this, Chrys, raw and rushing
    like the wind. if we crawl into the hole, we
    miss the rainbow and the sunlight that follows
    the storm..

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This one I like Chrystine
    All your writes take on a meaning of there own
    They are so thought provoking
    I love that about your poetry
    Please take care of yourself
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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