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Don't Feel Great


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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tell me what you think please


Don't Feel Great



For some reason
I don't feel great anymore
life has left an impression
like a forever closed door

don't really feel my rhymes
although i think them all the time
don't really wanna rep
and i now really hate to step

why? i don't know
i told you i'm not sure
it might be because you and me
really don't talk anymore

might be because i
feel beyond myself
or maybe just because
i'm in love with someone else




Submitted on 2005-12-10 20:56:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  kinda understand, kinda confused, fully impressed. this one was pretty good. i think rhymes all the time. but i'm running outta [censored] to say. u on the other hand seem to be just be kicking flows due to this whole ex boyfriend thing
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Love the last stanza. The top half of the poem was kind of cheesey. How could you be in love with someone else, if you felt great when you were with the other person? You got it? But good poem anyways. xoxoxo
| Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by UNIQUEWOODS69 | [ Reply to This ]


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