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    dots Submission Name: Confidence for the Averagedots
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    Author: sashanova
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 3/5/2
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       This was my first attempt at spoken word.


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    dotsConfidence for the Averagedots
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    I look in the mirror and I see,
    I see this girl,
    she's staring back at me.
    Bright eyes, half smile,
    she's putting herself down while
    I sit here,
    harsh words hit my ears.
    I can't escape my fears,
    for this is who I am,
    though I seem to be a sham,
    cuz all I want to be
    is someone who can see
    herself and smile
    and know she's pretty all the while.
    I say girl, don't despair
    stop worrying about your hair,
    and your make up looks just fine,
    you did it right,
    you took your time.
    So what if you got a little extra skin?
    It doesn't mean your fat,
    just cause your not thin.
    We can't all win
    Its the media hype
    that makes us fight,
    but its whats on the inside that counts,
    Right?!





    Submitted on 2005-12-10 23:42:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its a generic stereotype for a girl to feel and ask that question in that way, sadly its a real one. But in more cases its more then just the average girl... the poem was well versed and i liked it.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked what this poem did to me. I could see you sitting there infront of the mirror thinking those thoughts...sad in a way but inner beauty shines through all

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    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by Crackwalker | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way you emulate the syntax of the spoken word, its pretty cool. you might want to make your rhyme a little more regular though, especially if this is meant to be spoken.
    | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by lola47 | [ Reply to This ]


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