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    dots Submission Name: Show me the meaning of love”dots
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    Author: kellz
    ASL Info:    25/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 122/148/49
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 357
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1107



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    dotsShow me the meaning of love”dots
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    Take my hand
    Show me how to dance

    Touch my heart
    Give love another chance

    Tickle my senses
    With your sweetness

    Tide my world
    Make it always in neatness

    Tinkle my ears
    With what you gently say

    Tingle my hand
    By your soft touching way

    Tire me not
    With any kind of toughness

    Taste my fears
    Without roughness

    Tie my soul
    To yours

    Tender love me
    With your feelings that inside me pours

    Tightly hold my hand
    Never let it go

    Tip your love over me
    Every time in a row

    Title my life book
    Make the ending good

    Toil your feelings strongly
    With your strong manhood

    Tolerate my tensioned times
    Never give up on me

    Toast a vow tonight
    Always to make me free

    Tell me I’m your sweet dove
    Show me the meaning of love




    Submitted on 2004-04-25 16:04:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very original and highly creative. The structure, form and rhyme scheme is really good, and does not come across to me as being forced.

    A very enjoyable read.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-07-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Rhyme seemed forced. Kinda like how my poems are (ahem, ahem) lol. (yeah thats what ive been told, but no offense taken, none at all) It was sweet though,on the right track, but stanzas were short. Think that took some of it away too.
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]
      the rhyme is a bit forced but I liked your poem very much. it's really sweet. my favourite lines were
    'Title my life book
    Make the ending good'.
    but I would replace one 'strong' in the 14th stanza.
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that this is great the way it is wouldn't change it for the world (but i would for a dollar j/k) really sweet
    Crymson Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      this was sweet the alliteration @ the beginning of each stanza was great, it flowed well, each stanza had a compleate meaning, great write!
    | Posted on 2004-04-25 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]



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