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    dots Submission Name: the truthdots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/54/36
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsthe truthdots
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    the times have changed so fast
    in my life nothing seems to last
    love,pain and sorrow all factor in
    some people say i've lived my life in sin
    but you see no one even knows the true me
    because i dont let no any one in to truly see
    i keep myself al bottled up deep inside
    all my feeling i try hard to hide
    as if no matter what you do you cant break my pride
    and i sseem to step with a strong stride
    but you cant break my pride for its been shattered
    if you look deep inside the true me is compleatly tattered
    i'll finaly say im afraid to love in fear of being hurt
    for you see my heart has been slammed one to many times in the dirt
    so you see times have chaned so verey fast
    and every thing that ment something to me never lasts




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      this my darling was extreemly good im shure many can relate to this pice the emotion the pain the love just reach out and grab you this is raw and extreemly relateable/enjoyible you are a verry good young writter and i must say this is probly your best

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