Blind
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This may be the last time i can say this, but i found another one of my 'lost poems'. This along with my original 'The Choice' poem were found on a floppy disk hidden in my room somewhere. So, read and rate and all that, i personally really like this one, what do you guys think?
Blind
Blind, Seeing without truly seeing, You waltz around the world in a haze, Unaware of the destruction you cause to the order, Selfish in you quest for false power and greed, Why? Blind, You fight for causes that are not there, You resist the Truth that is beyond your reach, Yet you believe you are in the right, You believe that all is well, It is not. Blind, Your world is faltering, A decay caused by your own corruption, A disease that cannot be cured without truly seeing, Cut away the cancer that has taken hold of your souls, There is still time. Blind, Always Blind, Not even bothering to seek the Truth, Unable to realize your fault through your self-created illusion, So assure in your own significance, You are insignificant. Blind! Take heed, The Truth may be unattainable, But the journey alone can save your soul, Fight the ignorance, Seek the Truth, Blind, listen for the whispers of Truth. |
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| I like it. It's a decently difficult theme to master, it calls to the soul, and asks it to call back. It makes me think about things I've done, paths I've traveled, and people I've met. Bravo. Keep up the good work. Acid | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ] | I like it. It's a decently difficult theme to master, it calls to the soul, and asks it to call back. It makes me think about things I've done, paths I've traveled, and people I've met. Bravo. | Keep up the good work. Acid | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ] | I really like this! In the fifth line, I think "you" should be changed to "your". But besides that it was great. | There are so many people out there that are blind, not seeing the truth that's right in front of them. This really portrays that very well. Keep up the good work, I like your style! | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by mysterious one | [ Reply to This ] | lol, okay, this may sound very weird to you, but several of the stanzas reminded me of some of the Harry Potter books. It just did, I mean when you said order and you were talking about how these people were blind to all that is wrong around them pretending that all is just fine, it reminded me of it. lol, I'm sorry, it did, which is not a bad thing at all, I hope you don't take it as an insult, though, I dunno if you read them or not. Anyway, this was a very beautiful write and there wasn't a thing wrong with it. | | Posted on 2006-01-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ] | I really liked this. It had a powerful and strong use of words. It describes a lot of people in the world today. Sad, but true. | | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by sweetxoxosorrow | [ Reply to This ] | This too is powerful. It causes some soul searching for those of us who can see outside of ourself or maybe self involved. It's hard not to be unfair if your world is the only one you living in. Great message! | | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Mytee | [ Reply to This ] | I always like to use the word blind when talking about rascists and rednecks ( a pet peeve of mine) This was cool. My own attitude when I use the word blind is kind of like not only they don't want to see the truth or the reality, but they won't allow themselves to see it. Which really pisses me off. I liked this because I felt you were able to understand an emotion of mine which is a dislike (sometimes hate) of people like whoever you described in this poem. Really, it was an awesome write. Glad I am not the only one who sees it that way. | Metal Heart74 | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Metal Heart74 | [ Reply to This ] | good poem, i liked it. my interpretation would be that even though blind people cannot see, that doesn't stop them from seeing what they think they can see. some can see past eye sight into a more spirit/soul vision. its well written. but i have a question with this part of the first stanza: | Unaware of the destruction you cause to the order, Selfish in you quest for false power and greed, Why? what did you mean by this? was it that a blind person can cause damage to themselv'es by thinking they can see beyond sight? i hope you can understand what i mean, its quite hard to explain. good job and i expect to see much more from you. ~Insphered~ | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ] | Very well written | I believe That you were referring to people being blind to the true beauty that surronds there very soul This is so true Beauty is evreywhere in the world in evreything in front of Once we accept that beauty then we can begin to heal God Bless Ron | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] | wow, i wasnt expecting to see something like this on the new pages. Great work. I like the way you put the word "Blind" in front of every stanza, it keeps the reader reminded of what we are reading about. I enjoyed this and i wish you luck in your work. | | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by Di Re Rakord | [ Reply to This ] | well my good sir. | this is truely wonderfull. i love it more than uh um well you know. good job and that was a lie its good but not as good as well yea. xoxo that girl | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ] | Hey, good poem, but I wouldn't really call it beautiful. Not that it's not good, but it's direct and to the point, not really flashy and pretty. ... and that's a good thing. | keep up the good fight and your eyes open. -spencer | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by mrmundane | [ Reply to This ] | Wow very beautiful. It really conveys the corruption some of our society posseses.. | Very nice piece. I will be looking forward to some more.. :) | Posted on 2005-12-11 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ] | I like it. It's a decently difficult theme to master, it calls to the soul, and asks it to call back. It makes me think about things I've done, paths I've traveled, and people I've met. Bravo. | Keep up the good work. Acid | Posted on 2006-10-12 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ] | |
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