Nice. Some small errors, but I don't think I will go line by line correcting this time, heh.
It was cool, I had the soundeffects of Battlefield 2 in the background(my bro is playng it). So it really did a hellovalot for my reading experience. Not that your story couldn't hold up on its own, it is really good.
this chapter is just as good as the first... keep 'em coming and i'll keep coming back to read them... this is going to be one hell of a story, thats for sure... great work...
oh check your spelling of Sergeant - you want this to look and sound as authentic as possible, so fix that little mistake and i'll be happy...
Submission Name: A Once Quiet Day
