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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 302
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    How do I feel???
    I feel hurt and angry
    I feel depressed and lonely
    Like I have no place to go
    No one to talk to

    I feel like I'm not going anywhere
    I'm in a neutral state
    At least things won't get any worse
    But they arent getting any better
    I just wish I could escape
    Why do I feel this way

    I feel like just falling over to die
    I can't get out of this box
    I am trapped in my own sorrow
    And I can never escape
    I feel like crying wont help
    Why do I feel this way

    I feel like I'm ugly
    Like everyone's better than me
    Like they're all against me
    I keep damning them to hell
    But they just won't die
    they are backing me into a corner
    why do i feel this way

    I feel like I'm calling out for help
    But no one's listening
    God is ignoring me
    Because I belong in hell
    But hell ignores me too
    Why do I feel this way

    I feel like dying
    But every time I try
    I just can't do it
    I keep thinking maybe it'll get better
    But I know im just bullshitting myself
    Why do I feel this way

    I feel like if I just take this
    I'll feel better
    But the feeling's only temporary
    The drugs dont last forever
    So I stop taking it
    My head is clear
    But my heart is black
    Why do I feel this way

    I feel sick and dizzy
    I need the drugs
    But I leave them there
    I figure it's not helping

    Why do I feel these things
    Why do I feel this way
    Why, why, why, why, why

    I guess I'll never know.




    Submitted on 2005-12-12 06:10:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      real good and unique ...emotions a re flowing well and relatable...only you can answer the questions you ask though and things will always get better...remember the corny line tis too shall pass...beleive it or not it is true...as many times in my life I've been in your place and thougt it would never canged but that one ting to make it all better sooner or later comes along and everyting is alright...the trick is do you have the strength to wait for it? You sould not have tis as untitled..you sould title it why? or I feel or something like that...just a suggestion
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by tinkerbellsas | [ Reply to This ]
      the answers to these questions are ones you may not want to find. what i like about this write is it shows how someone is confused and wants to solve the confusion but cant because the answers just cause more confusion. it was composed very well you get a 4.
    -brandon
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
      I used to ask myself these questions a lot, too. I'm still searching, but not asking. So maybe if you stopped asking for a while and started searching... maybe that would do something. It certainly has for me.

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Lavender | [ Reply to This ]
      Some of these questions I ask myself sometimes. This writing describes those questions deeply in the aspect of my heart and my mind. It's amazing that you could put them into words, but some people have a better talent at that then I do. Usually when people feel this way they look for someone to blame, and that I'm guilty of. Hope you go far with your writing/ poetry and good luck.

    ~*AnGeL*~
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by missing_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      I think we will always be seeking answers, regardless of whatever stage of life we are in. and I believe that most of the answers, only we ourselves and not others, can seek them. this is a rather teenage angsty or venting sort of poem. not saying that it's bad or anything. jus hope that by writing this down, you feel better, even if it's jus a tad better.

    neat form/structure you have there.

    take care,

    Rachel
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by wilted_ | [ Reply to This ]


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