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My mum

Author: nuttyginna
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My mum died last monday, and this is the poem that I have written and will be saying on Wednesday at her funeral. I hope she will be pleased with it!

My mum

There are not enough good words, to describe my mum.
She really was the best.
Despite her pain she always smiled
And now she peacefully rests.

She was wonderful and kind, brave and strong.
Beautiful through and through.
She'll be missed by all of us
And she's watching whatever we do.

So today we grieve, for the wonder we've lost
They'll be tears to say the least.
So God bless you our dear sweet angel
And may you forever rest in Peace.

Submitted on 2005-12-12 07:12:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  im sure your mom would have loved it. it was great. thanx for sharing that w/ us. u definatley expressed how ur mom was a great person and how wonderful she must have been. sry that you had to suffer thru losing her. keep up the good work tho, writing is a wonderful way of channeling ur feelings.
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by tomboy | [ Reply to This ]
  mmmm, thanks a bunch for sharing. and you've got all the sympathy i've to offer, i can't imagine what it must be like to loose my mother. i'm glad you seem to be doing well though, and she seems as though she was an amazing person. gret writee, again thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Cannablisjunkie | [ Reply to This ]
  thx for the write, its always sad to loose someone you love and especially a mom, the one person who gave you preciously the opposite: life!
tak care
| Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by caspian | [ Reply to This ]

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