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    dots Submission Name: Pages of My Lifedots
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    Author: RyukiTZR
    ASL Info:    14/F/-
    Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 133/130/44
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 331
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1294



    Description:
       I don't know what for I'm writing this. Just that jingly jangly feeling... Hope whoever reads it enjoys it.


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    dotsPages of My Lifedots
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    I tilt the cover,
    Smiling to see,
    The pages of my Life,
    What had happened to me...

    The first breath of air,
    Gosh, was I bare!
    Looked back and thought,
    Oh, I didn't care...

    Started to crawl,
    And then to walk.
    Of course I had my brawls,
    But cool, I've started to talk...

    Soon I went to school,
    And read from a book.
    The only problem was,
    Getting my coat of the hook...

    I've grown much taller,
    Then I had my first crush.
    He was like, oh wow!
    But sheesh, things were just a rush...

    Studies get much harder,
    Homework started to pile up,
    But hell no way,
    For now I won't give up!

    When it comes to holidays,
    I go back to snoring.
    Get up, eat and play.
    Soon it great to go back to school-if not, boring!

    ...I've stop turning the pages,
    As the words are gone.
    There'll always be more,
    By the time of dawn.

    I'm not dead yet,
    I'm still young.
    Everything's not yet written,
    But surely as time goes by,
    The book
    Will
    Be
    Done.




    Submitted on 2005-12-12 10:25:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this. It was very creative. It may not give much detail into your life...but it was definitly cute. However, I noticed that some of your words were mispelled. "Getting my coat of the hook" of should be off; and "I've stop turning the pages" should be I've stopped turning the pages. But other than that...this was a really good write.
    | Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the concept of the book, its much different then ne other poem ive ever read n i thnk thats why i enjoyd it so much.
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    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved how it showed the times that you so willingly lived. It was good write. Format didn't seem to be an issue here. Nice, though. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i love this and your dog up there i loved how it opend a new book and showed me you r life as if i was there to see the things that went on...
    wow that was so good...

    Shygirl

    Over and Out
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by shygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      It's like a scrap book poem, i really like it. dispays my life practically to a t, hmm scary. well good job. i like the bit about the 1st crush, it makes my remember my past.
    Tabbie Kat
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]



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