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    dots Submission Name: Chelsea's Poemdots
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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 832
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       I promised her I would have this done by Christmas! I have one for her older sister called "I have a daughter", now any parent knows that they have to be equal, one cannot be better than the other or some feelings may get hurt. so if you comment on this one please read the other and comment there too, I dont want her to feel like I love her less when that is impossible!!


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    dotsChelsea's Poemdots
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    My daughter Chelsea
    is thirteen years old.
    She works really hard
    to make honor roll.

    She's tall and thin
    with a beautiful heart.
    She lives with her dad.
    We're so far apart.

    I miss her much more
    than any words can say
    I wish that I could
    hold her everyday.

    There are things, to her,
    I cannot explain.
    There are things, I've done,
    that I feel ashamed

    With her long blonde hair
    and big blue eyes,
    She fills up my dreams
    nearly every night.

    So I wrote this poem,
    to tell my baby girl,
    I love her so much.
    She completes my world.




    Submitted on 2005-12-12 10:30:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      She's going to love this! I know I do! Love can bridge the space between mother and daughter. She will feel your love and caring through this simply stated loving poem. My father and I never lost touch and he is still very close to my heart.

    I must go read the other one now!

    Take Care!

    Chell
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this was beautiful.
    I am sure that she will feel loved after reading it, there is no doubting the love here.

    the end was the most touching. It really just brought a smile to my face knowing how much that you cared for her.
    I am sorry that she is not with you, I am sure that it is hard.
    But, she is lucky to have a mother like you.
    I am sure she will see that too.

    Wonderful job.
    Take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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