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    dots Submission Name: Grow Updots
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    Author: Oddly Normal
    ASL Info:    19/M/right behind you
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 7/7/2
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 897
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 501



    Description:
       All S's are 5's. Got it?
    I got bored with everyones whining. Cen5or this.


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    dotsGrow Updots
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    De5erted 5treet5 are lined with fruitle55 pain,
    Bar5 are filled with tortured 5oul5,
    Only the weak 5eem to remain,
    But their whining ha5 grown old,
    Cen5or your thoughts for ju5t a little while.

    Your crie5 are many and filled with mirth,
    Your lives are depressing or are they not?
    People like you 5hould ki55 the turf,
    You right your crap without a thought,
    Cen5or your lie5 ju5t for a little while.

    Grow Up.




    Submitted on 2005-12-12 11:30:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      5plendid 5tuff
    but I don't know about the 5e5ee5 all 5witched for five5..
    it i5 more difficult to read, but inere5ting
    Cheer5
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by ertha | [ Reply to This ]
      Well the content is good, sad and true unfortuanately but the 5's are just kinda weird and draw attention away from the poem it's self. i suggest you go back to regular s's and not keep the 5's
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Tabbie Kat | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it but the 5's definatly have to go.I find it extremly stupid to see people use numbers as diffrent letters and especially in poetry.It takes the focus off the poem and what it's about and throws the reader off.

    ->Candace<-
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm confused as to why all the S's are 5's...That is not coming to me, but it gives good effect. Nice write. Keep it up.


    The only Pain is Silent.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello, I like your unique style with the 5s and stuff.. very original.

    The rhyming is cool but the story is just a little bland (sorry...)

    I like it though.

    So who are you? and why are you stalking me?

    Just wondering..
    Talk to you later
    Amber
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]


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