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    dots Submission Name: the neckless and so much moredots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Michigan UP
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/50/38
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 280
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    you could give me Opals I would care less
    you could give me stones form the moon I would careless
    you could give me your birth-stone and a I would be over joyed , I 'd give you mine too
    you could give me a dimond I would like that too
    but being with you is all that matters to me really

    I love you so , I am over joyed when you give me a box that has our neckless with three stones ; the first stone is your birth-stone, the second stone is my birth-stone
    and the thrid stone is our first christmas together
    the balnk spot you tell me is for when we both go to college and move in with you . I was so over joyed when you asked me out and then you proposed to me and i said yes .
    I love you and will always love you





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