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    dots Submission Name: Broken Promisedots
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    Author: StevenJay
    ASL Info:    21, Male, Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 27/36/14
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 629
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 849



    Description:
       To anyone who has ever had a broken heart this should make a lot of sense.


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    dotsBroken Promisedots
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    Woken up by the melody of an angel whispering in my ear
    Telling me that she would love me forever,
    Dancing under the painted sky believing in the stories
    The daydreams that come and go like the sun and the moon,
    Still among the snowflakes in the middle of May
    Trying to be understood by the ghosts within my past,
    Beginning to be forgotten
    Beginning to go blind
    To the life and love Iíve lost
    To the memories that bring on the waterworks
    Teary eyes bleed for the heart thatís been destroyed,
    Stumbling alive through the dryness of my day
    Hoping to smile
    Hoping to be cut
    So I can feel something, anything to prove Iím still alive,
    Woken up by the melody of an angel whispering in my ear
    Telling me that she would love me forever.




    Submitted on 2005-12-12 12:48:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this is quite the peice...I love the emotion that flows through it..it shows alot about you and how you felt..My favorite part would be Woken up by the melody of an angel whispering in my ear
    Telling me that she would love me forever
    This reminds me of my past life and how someone promised me that but it never worked out...But this is definatley a fave! take Care

    Crys
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      Everybody can relate, and if oyu can't, then you've never really loved anybody...very good...consider a couple fo breaks between stanzas though, its easier to read that way...excellent work.

    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i can relate n that sucks cuz even tho i dont want to i do

    i love this part tho
    "Trying to be understood by the ghosts within my past,"
    i def do struggle with my past
    goodjob <33ash
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel for you, this is a great write. I love this part "So I can feel something, anything to prove Iím still alive"

    anywyz keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Darko | [ Reply to This ]


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