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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       waiting for a loved one to come out of pig city (jail) and missing them


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    i promised i will be here for you,
    no matter what the situation may be.
    i do this for you,
    as you do for me.
    dont think your alone,
    because your not here.
    i love you my baby,
    ill always be near.
    id be with you right now,
    if only i could.
    standing beside you,
    like your woman should.
    it wont be long,
    till your back home again,
    ill come and visit,
    jst tell me when.
    your phone calls aint long enough,
    i miss your voice,
    i know you would be here,
    if you had the choice.
    just two more months,
    thats all it will be.
    till your out of pig city,
    and back home with me.




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      Terse and most ably done, with all of the correct slang and "proper" misspellings ... I liked this poem muchly ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,
    I liked this write i get the feeling of the guy being in prison, but there is also the dedication of you to always stand by him no matter what
    Nice
    John
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i figured the least i could do is read sum of your works too. i really enjoyed. this was beautiful i love the confidence u have in the bond between both of you. the emotion is intense. where is pig city tho?
    | Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by lost omen | [ Reply to This ]
      I got a little thrown off. It seemed to be about a person that is away in the military. Then, at the end it said "pig city," which made me think of prison or jail. Overall, very good work.
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by Whildkaht | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it! My favorite part was like your women should. It just shows dedication! Who was this about ? It remined me of someone in the military or jail. I really liked how you put it together & it flowed really good! Keep it up ! =]] - iN xO lOVE *
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by iN xO Love | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good piece. You just poured your feelings into these words. when your man comes back make sure he stays out of trouble. Good luck!

    PinkFairy
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a really great poem. i love when you said you'd be waiting like your women should. for some reason that stuck out to me because it's as if you are displaying sort of ownership, like he's yours, you're his. to me that signifies a devotion to each other that is really deep. where is your boyfriend/husband at? it seems he's either in the war or in jail or something... i could be off though. i love the poem though. just make a few spelling corrections and it'll be good to go.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by puddinrckr | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem shows love for this person but it seem as if you two are growing apart because yall are soo far away. i loved your dedication in it. the only problems were a few spelling errors but above all it was a great write
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Leon Kennedy | [ Reply to This ]
      It gave me a sense of security, and serenity...If my mate had written something like that to me i would blush.
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]


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