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    dots Submission Name: questiondots

    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    I found myself
    Looking for a reason
    Just to talk to you

    I wanted to ask
    A very important question
    But inside I knew

    You didnít feel the way I did
    So I just left you alone
    If only I would have known

    I watched you live your life
    I was there when the knife
    Cut the first piece of wedding cake

    That was when I felt my heart break
    But that was all because
    I didnít ask the question

    Cause I knew you didnít feel the way I did
    So I left you alone
    If only I had known

    Then one day I got the call
    You were gone my love my all
    I felt as if a part of me was dead

    That day still fills me with dread
    After the hour of mourning we found
    Your journal and we read it aloud

    It talked of how
    You wanted to ask
    A guy a question but instead you passed

    Up the chance
    Because he didnít feel
    The same way as you
    Or thatís just what you assumed

    Submitted on 2005-12-12 16:36:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is a little confusing. i get the twist at the end, but did the guy die? What happened. Is it to late for the two to be together?

    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      oooh, nice sting at the end...gives you that feeling of 'my god how could I have been so stupid' and that kind of sinking feeling that comes from a bad ending. Very good work, the flow was off a little, but the story made up for it.

    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good,
    the story to it was different,
    never read anything like this before,
    and your only 15
    ma gawd, your v. talented,
    thanx for sharing
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]

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