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    dots Submission Name: %*&^ Bozo *&^$^dots

    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       the fear of ......I have it---I hate them---they are fake and old and fake and fake--I hate them!!! And they are all old----think about it

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    dots %*&^ Bozo *&^$^dots


    Their Faces
    decomposed white death,
    with red smears of glee.
    I donít see whatís so funny,
    getting off on getting a smile,
    or making a grown man feel like a child.
    Or go to therapy
    till heís 40.


    Like Halloween
    I never loved a parade.
    Nor the charade
    Or disguise they wear.
    I can see through the layers
    Make up
    too Faked up
    only to shake up lifetimes later.


    The deceit
    because it has to be.
    Painting on a smile for so long.
    Becomes a little less genuine eventually.
    They age.
    and the caked on fake
    they put on
    doesnít cover
    The actor's agiing blues-
    so gracefully
    And the red nose,
    maybe it IS
    from the booze?
    Or walking around
    in somebody elses shoes.




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      [censored] it dog if you gotta tell yourself how u ok, they prolly bad. I gonna have to come visit you if i end up out there. You near SF or LA? I'm applyin to medschools and thas where those things r. I'm too tight right now to actually dig into this beyond the christmas trees - damn this holiday. But i appreciate wot u wrote to me on my latest. Frankly, I'm tryin to get a job in therapy, and i realize y they talk so much bull[censored]. See, in order to even counsel, you need a masters - that means 6 or so straight years of hearing they bull[censored] about how anger and hatred and regret are unnatural and wrong - right wotever. 6 years of any consecutive [censored] and you'll believe anything. Its funny how fakeness works - stick with it long enough and that [censored] becomes real.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate clowns. I think I've mentioned that before. Creepy bas.tards. I hate clowns. This is a great piece, very eloquent into the very real fear of clowns and a detailed outline of WHY you hate clowns. Awesome. It's nice to find a fellow human that hates those freaky ass wierdo's. I'm just sure that underneath the make-up, every clown has the potential to be a John Wayne Gasey. *shudder* I friggin' hate clowns.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Clusophobia...ya know, I thought people were joking around when they said they didn't like Ronald McDonald type people. I am a huge fan of mimes, but that's my little morbid sense of humor.

    If people hate clowns so much, why are they still out here? Being emplyed for birthday parties and such???

    And we doesn't Santa scare anyone- I mean you can hardly see his face, he wants you to whisper in his ear, tells you he's going to sneak into your house while you're alseep, and then he offers you candy if you sit...ON HIS LAP!

    Strange times, babe!

    I really liked this piece though- looks like it was a lot of work...

    Nice to have you posting again!

    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      oh dear Mike...I suppose you're not a big IT fan then huh? lol! just messing with ya hun. hoenestly, nothing for me to correct here. very well done, love the set up and repetition, and my favorite lines have to be...

    "Or walking around
    in somebody elses shoes."

    i just love it. ^_^
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]

    There's not much else to say on the matter. Many people I know, and this seems to be the common opinion. Albeit, you are the first to put it so eloquently, but the concept is a VERY common one. I for one love clowns. I am personal friends with one, who is sincerely in it to make people happy. She likes to see kids smile. I'm not saying that either one is right, but I would like to point out that the concept of clowns is rather noble. Their sole purpose, nay career is to make people happy. On the flipside, they ARE being fake, but it is being quite obvious about it. Consider this: if you really wanted to be false, wouldn't you make an effort to decieve those around you? Clowns put on the makeup to accentuate their act, not pretend to be happy. Who would laugh at a normal dude with a tutu and umbrella, getting bopped on the head with a plastic rolling pin? I wouldn't. This is a phenomenal expression of the general clown phobia, but I challenge someone to make a poem glorifying, or at least romanticizing the life of a clown :P That's something I would like to read.

    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by WitlessPagan | [ Reply to This ]
      The fear of clowns is driving you into therapy (and the inevitable debt that comes with paying for the therapist's advice)? Seriously, you do seem to understand how illusory the painted smiles and layered make-up can be; how easily they hide true intent and emotion behind the facade of false mirth and companionship (sort of like a bad date, but I digress). The structure was perhaps more intriguing than the write; I thought I was reading a Christmas ornament festooned with the mantra of fearlessness. Very nicely done.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      hey LameMansTerms,
    Okay, what to start with. First off that was VERY well put together. Your structure was unique and very creative. I would have to say you definately put the time and effort into this. I will say for sure that I have not seen anything like this and that is what makes the appearance so fenominal.
    Second, everything in this write was completely relatable. Your interpretation on the Halloween time of year was most eye-catching.
    I do hope to read more from you in the future.
    ~much love~
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Imaginth | [ Reply to This ]

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