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    dots Submission Name: Januarydots

    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A few childhood memories of growing up in Ontario, particularly school days.

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    These winds have passed this way before
    I know them like scars
    Frozen furrowed fields
    Humped in hard packed white
    And cold steel in schoolyards
    Toungues tasted and stuck fast
    Finally set free
    Warm water from a blue cup
    Accompanied by red nosed laughter
    And pointing mittened hands
    The words wrapped in curling clouds
    Afloat in January air
    Gathered by frost stung ears
    The comfort of being inside
    Hot chocolate and heat
    Chap stick, warm feet
    Then the cold reality
    of education........

    Submitted on 2005-12-12 21:21:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see that you are speaking of being outside during recess or lunch and then going back inside. I could just feel the pain and discomfort of having my tongue stuck to cold steel.
    My favourite are the first four lines, and "the words wrapped in curling clouds, afloat in January air." there is some powerful imagery here. This clearly could only come from the mind of someone all too familiar with extreme cold winters and long, dreary Januarys. January always was my least favourite month of the year.
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey this is very cool. Childhoods are cool to think back to.

    I like your descriptions.

    It actually reminds me alot of January in Michigan.. hehe

    and I can totally relate to the end..
    Childhood, happy
    growing up.. argh..
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      i had a blue cap...
    loved the poem. it really brought back memories, and a little bit of sadness too. and i like how you break from the syntax every once and a while, it's a jolt from everything that's going on.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by lola47 | [ Reply to This ]
      theb crappy febuary comes aroubd abd teaches us of heart breaking trips
    the long lasting hurts that makes us vomit abd wish to flip
    lol peace and this did brought back my childhood days also
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]

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