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    dots Submission Name: Circledots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1060
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 889



    Description:
       This is about the most positive piece I have written. I know it's not the best but it's the truth

    I hope you like it


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    Pain is Power
    Power is Desire
    Desire is Sin
    Sin is Destruction
    Destruction is Chaos
    Chaos is Pain

    such is the cirlce
    no on can break
    pain is power
    power is death

    you can try to bust loose
    and free yourself
    but you can't your trapped
    too bad for you

    push the walls
    stop the constraint
    try all you want
    push with all your might

    I laugh at you
    because you're blind
    can't you see?
    No you're a fool

    Pain is Worry
    Power is Love
    Desire is Perserverence
    Sin is Serenity
    Destruction is Resurrection
    Chaos is Order

    All has two sides
    see the evil
    see the good
    don't fight the circle
    make it as it should




    Submitted on 2005-12-13 10:10:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i liked this one a lot better than the other one. not only was the message good but it was much more interesting to read. im not trying to be hasrh when i say the other was a bit...lacking. im just staing my opinion. this one was dandy though.
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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