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Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 122
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This is about the most positive piece I have written. I know it's not the best but it's the truth

I hope you like it


Pain is Power
Power is Desire
Desire is Sin
Sin is Destruction
Destruction is Chaos
Chaos is Pain

such is the cirlce
no on can break
pain is power
power is death

you can try to bust loose
and free yourself
but you can't your trapped
too bad for you

push the walls
stop the constraint
try all you want
push with all your might

I laugh at you
because you're blind
can't you see?
No you're a fool

Pain is Worry
Power is Love
Desire is Perserverence
Sin is Serenity
Destruction is Resurrection
Chaos is Order

All has two sides
see the evil
see the good
don't fight the circle
make it as it should

Submitted on 2005-12-13 10:10:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liked this one a lot better than the other one. not only was the message good but it was much more interesting to read. im not trying to be hasrh when i say the other was a bit...lacking. im just staing my opinion. this one was dandy though.
| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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