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    dots Submission Name: Open Endsdots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1118
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 590



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    DO IT OR I'LL BUST YOUR ASS


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    A Poem dedicated to the Haters and the Lovers


    Open your heart
    open the world
    let it all out
    discover yourself

    Find your soul
    and show it proud
    End the lies
    and show only the truth

    Open your eyes
    and see the greatness
    see the beauty
    the beauty of truth

    Open your mind
    and learn to live
    learn to live together
    Jew, Christia, Muslim,and Pagan

    End the Hate
    End the Mistrust
    End the Facades
    End all the Lies




    Submitted on 2005-12-13 10:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm interesting. Is this the one you described in class to me? I understand your fustration. I think the idea was true, could be played out a little better, but nicely done.
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Kalis | [ Reply to This ]
      awww nice messgae but i think possibly the poem could have been a little better. it seemed slightly empty.
    Find your soul
    and show it proud
    End the lies
    and show only the truth

    soul searching can only get you so far
    but it might get you your soul
    bare it all
    and end the dishonesty
    show only truth

    im not saying use that im saying something like that might make it a better read.
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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