Open Ends

Author: Flamequill ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35 Words: 84

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Open Ends

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A Poem dedicated to the Haters and the Lovers Open your heart open the world let it all out discover yourself Find your soul and show it proud End the lies and show only the truth Open your eyes and see the greatness see the beauty the beauty of truth Open your mind and learn to live learn to live together Jew, Christia, Muslim,and Pagan End the Hate End the Mistrust End the Facades End all the Lies

Submitted on 2005-12-13 10:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Hmm interesting. Is this the one you described in class to me? I understand your fustration. I think the idea was true, could be played out a little better, but nicely done.

| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Kalis | [ Reply to This ]

awww nice messgae but i think possibly the poem could have been a little better. it seemed slightly empty. Find your soul and show it proud End the lies and show only the truth soul searching can only get you so far but it might get you your soul bare it all and end the dishonesty show only truth im not saying use that im saying something like that might make it a better read.

| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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