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Open Ends

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Open Ends

A Poem dedicated to the Haters and the Lovers

Open your heart
open the world
let it all out
discover yourself

Find your soul
and show it proud
End the lies
and show only the truth

Open your eyes
and see the greatness
see the beauty
the beauty of truth

Open your mind
and learn to live
learn to live together
Jew, Christia, Muslim,and Pagan

End the Hate
End the Mistrust
End the Facades
End all the Lies

Submitted on 2005-12-13 10:15:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmm interesting. Is this the one you described in class to me? I understand your fustration. I think the idea was true, could be played out a little better, but nicely done.
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by Kalis | [ Reply to This ]
  awww nice messgae but i think possibly the poem could have been a little better. it seemed slightly empty.
Find your soul
and show it proud
End the lies
and show only the truth

soul searching can only get you so far
but it might get you your soul
bare it all
and end the dishonesty
show only truth

im not saying use that im saying something like that might make it a better read.
| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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