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Author: EEKS
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this is what i do when im bored. i write random drivel.


slit the hopes
slice the dreams
tear you faith to shreds
ending the confetti shortage
laugh yourself into a coma
what does life have to offer that darkness doesnt?

pessimistic?, optimistic?
ill just smashed my glass anyway
so what the hell
ill just say im alive

anger is better than speed until you crash
but instead of mental burnout
its you head against the wall

i cried as i watched you fall
never knowing you jumped
you deserted me and now im still here
waiting for someone to help me out of my hole

i put everything i had into life
and it gave me hope
not exactly an even trade
because hope is like a dart
it might hit you and it might not
but youll be scared all the same

reaching out only to be cast out
and thrown down
now ill stay lock up
better than being shut out

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