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    dots Submission Name: A poem for youdots

    Author: cannibal
    ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 47/47/15
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Friendship
    Total Views: 862
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       it does not ryme I know. And there most likely is a lot of errors. One of my firends wanted me to write a poem discribing how I feel about him. I couldn't put how I feel into words. So I just put my thoughts down. I know it sucks but oh well.

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    dotsA poem for youdots

    Let me dabble down some words
    A pin can not write what this mind thinks of you
    Let me cup the strange forms in my hand and feed them to you
    Maybe then the ink will not taint the meaning

    No words can describe
    Maybe sounds can amplify your meaning to me
    But even then it would be to loud to bare

    The dictionary does not hold a word for it
    No language can describe it
    I think that they should create a word for you
    And then maybe
    Just maybe it would give some meaning
    But my friend for now you are just a thought that can not be heard
    Can not be written
    So I will think
    Un till they find a suitable way to define a person like you.

    Submitted on 2005-12-13 13:26:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this
    I can tell just by reading this this Friend means the World to You
    If you havent I urge you to share this write with him
    Very Well Done

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    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really awesome poem and I'm sure he'll love it, there's some typos and the such that you might want to look over but this poem kicks bum.

    >>Maybe then the ink will not taint the meaning<<

    I like that line, and I like these ones, too:

    >>Maybe sounds can amplify your meaning to me
    But even then it would be to loud to bare<<

    Keep Writing

    p.s. Welcome to Elite
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]

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