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    dots Submission Name: Funny Howdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 546
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This was a poem i wrote in english class so it isn't all that great. These were throught running through my head.

    Let me know what you think.


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    dotsFunny Howdots
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    Funny how life,
    never goes the way it should.
    That we all try to live,
    Live such a life that doesn’t exist.
    To persuade for things,
    we know we can’t have.
    To dream such dreams,
    We know will never come true.
    To love some one,
    Who doesn’t love you back?
    Funny how we want things in life,
    We know we can never have.
    Funny how we wish for other families then our own,
    When ours will be the best you’ll ever have.
    Funny how we wish we were someone else,
    Someone better then us.
    Funny how we hurt, cut, bruise, burn
    To take away the pain we feel inside.
    Funny how we take away internal pain,
    By causing external pain.
    Funny how we hurt those we love.
    Funny how we try to hide our problems,
    Even though we know they won’t go away until we fix them.
    Funny how we can only see faults in other,
    Rather then the beauty behind everyone.
    Funny how we look in the mirror,
    Longing to be perfect, beautiful, and “skinny.”
    Funny how we long to be that,
    When we know deep down we already are.
    Funny how I know all these things,
    Yet I’ll go back to doing them.










    Submitted on 2005-12-13 16:25:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey,

    Good poem(does that word work for a new word we'll see). Anyways how are you. I like the title funny how it works pefrectly, because of the irony throught out the poem.

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    Raven
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I think this topic was too serious to title it "funny how" and to repeat that through the entire thing...maybe you were trying to be ironic...it was pretty good and to compliment you I read the whole thing...sometimes when I run across angsty poems I don't even finish them because they all say the same thing...

    But this is a true poem and it shows that you really care and I think it was a wise topic to chose to write about...something that people can relate to.

    Happy Holidays.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree that the poem is a bit long, and there are a few grammar/spelling errors but like I tell EVERYONE I only say that to help I'm probably the worse one writing with that.

    However the thought behind it is wise, and there are really good phrases & word conjunctions in this piece. Great work! Great write! Wonderful mind!
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem. yeah it is a long poem so maybe you can try to shape stazas by adding spaces between some lines. but other then that i think reading this makes you relate to it some way some how you did a good job
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good, but as i say to everyone there is and always be room for improvement in any piece of work that you write, so continue to better yourself.
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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