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    dots Submission Name: Court Of Raindots
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    Author: thetwilight
    ASL Info:    23/F/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 81/68/15
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 930
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    dotsCourt Of Raindots
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    It's December in
    The court of rain.

    Supine circles
    Encircle shame.

    It will all be January
    Soon again.

    It will all be January
    Soon again.

    Paradox flocks the
    Open aim

    Clear shot to rot
    And plot the blame.

    It's December in
    The court of rain.

    It's December in
    The court of rain.

    Dreams have gone out
    With the tree
    New Years Garbage;
    Faked belief.

    It all comes with
    The price of me.

    It all comes with
    The price of me.

    Pretty Penny
    For A tattered bow
    Pretty Penny
    For A blow
    Pretty Penny
    For all the woe
    Twitching in the afterglow.

    Banquet dinner
    Serving pain.

    It's December
    In the court of rain.




    Submitted on 2005-12-13 17:59:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This had an old-timey, sing songy feel to it and I liked the style.
    I particularly liked, "Dreams have gone out
    With the tree
    New Years Garbage;
    Faked belief."
    That was like a little poem within and it has much truth!
    Love,Peace,Joy~Feel,Experience,BE!
    tif
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey I'll not pretend that I understand this because I don't, lots of the content here paint a picture of a prostitute whose none to chuffed with life, am I even close?

    Paradox flocks the
    Open aim

    Clear shot to rot
    And plot the blame.

    This sounds great, but if you could clarify it that would be good because I think this is just too damn clever for a simple yorkshire lad like myself.
    my ignorance aside, for the time being. This is all quite well structured and each line rolls easily into the next, so I like it. Just got figure out what it's saying.

    TTFN
    V
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really pretty write
    I loved this
    The style you wrote this in is very different
    But
    this still carries a steady flow
    Very Nice Write
    Your Friend
    Ron
    And also thank you for pointing out some of my spelling mistakes I quickly corrected them
    And I am Honered by the addition Race Of A Lifetime to your favorites list
    Thank You
    I will be looking for more posts from you
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Your style reminds me of like Jewel or someone like that...you write with a female mind...you are a romantic soul and it shows...seems like you have a thing fir december too,lol. This was a really good piece...you really are talented...I am becoming a fan.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm. makes one truly think. In order to understand what's behind it, you have to read it a few times, and then you're still left guessing. Says something perhaps along the line of a heart that's had enough and finally decides to fight back...despite of any pain it will endure...and still holds on to the knowledge that life will all be good again. Amazing.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Dark_Dancer | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, has really nice texture..and a good flow of words. has a nice meaning to it...The way you made the words connect.
    it was a really nice write...
    nik
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an awsome write. I loved the way it flowed. How it held and pulled me into it. The flow from one stanza to the next was right on que.

    Nice write.

    illusions
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was very differnt and very good. It flowed really well and was easy to follow and read - well done. And welcome to the site.
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this, not quite my style but its nice to have a little variety. welcome to elite skills...i'll be watching for more from you.
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by lesh09 | [ Reply to This ]


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