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    dots Submission Name: Ebony and Ivorydots
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    Author: PsychoBabble214
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 103/109/29
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 854
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       ebony and ivory...beautiful words arent they?


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    Ebony satin and ivory silk
    Melt thy souls into one
    Burn bright in the silence
    Extinguish the sun

    Sheets wrap my body
    Confining me tight
    Suffocating darkness
    Tears within the night

    Muffled screams of agony
    Split the seams wide
    And still, my colored eyes
    We’ve nowhere to hide

    Ebony hair
    And ivory skin
    Can thou describe
    What lies within?

    Choked by silk; killed by satin
    Colored eyes come to close
    Lay me down, wrapped up tight
    Ebony and ivory; the end I chose




    Submitted on 2005-12-13 19:06:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey this is my again, I realize that while reading it again I started relating to being in a coffin at the end of life and existance and resting at death,
    "the end i chose"
    I mean it made perfect sense to me, the more i read this the more i am loving it again, just so you know i admire that poem a lot. Very well written and words well chosen.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by PoetPhilosopher | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very impacting and pulling. That was absolutey crazy, i absolutely envy your ways of imagery, very good. 8 out of 10. For what it was it was perfect. I wouldn't recommend a thing!
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by PoetPhilosopher | [ Reply to This ]


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