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    dots Submission Name: suicidedots
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    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    It kills me when I know the one I love,
    cant love me back, it rips me apart,
    when she takes my heart,
    and throws it away,
    and I just donít understand,
    why cupids dart,
    had to pierce my heart,
    and make me long for her,
    but ill put an end,
    to all the pain and suffering,
    that Iím going through,
    so ill put a noose around my neck,
    and jump off the rafters,
    and ill wait until Iím out of breath,
    then ill embrace my death,
    without her I have no will to live,
    so why should I keep living in despair,
    and even if I died no one would care,
    so I might as well end my life,
    because I know I cant have her and it pains me, to think I ever had a chance,
    a chance at romance,
    so ill put a noose around my neck,
    and jump off the rafters,
    and wait until Iím out of breath,
    then ill embrace my death,
    I donít want to live my life with rejection,
    or for that matter any other emotions,
    that cause me pain and cause me suffering,
    so now,
    I will put the noose around my neck,
    and jump off the rafters,
    and before I die ill be full of laughter,
    and when I run out of breath,
    I will embrace my deathÖÖ





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      This is extremly sad. I am really hoping that this is based on feeling s that you are trying to vent rather than true intentions. While I can certainly realte to where you are coming from, we all have moments of desperation, love can be a real [censored].

    You learn after a while to not completely devote yourself to ones that you love so wholeheartedly, I guess it comes with age where you learn that not every woman is worthy of your love and not every woman is going to treat you with the same respect that you deserve.

    All I can hope for you is that you dont end up like how I was for a very long time. Never able to completely love another out of fear of being hurt. I missed out on many opportunities because of my "player" ways. I used my hard exterior as a defense and I have to this day never truely loved... Im working on it though!

    Just dont let one [censored] destroy the love that you have to give to a very deserving and lucky woman some day!

    I did have a very personal expirience with suicide that opened up my eyes in so many ways. Not only did it make me a very caring and loving person, but it destryoed my life also... bitter sweet, I guess.. I hope you read it its "final Sin" Hope to hear from you

    Hugs,
    Ella

    Hugs,
    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      so sad and depressing...but a good write as it is...and as everyone else ya know I have to preach about this type of topic...I say that there is only one person on earth that is worth killing yourself over and tat one person is the one person that will never do anything to you that will make you want to do it...love is great but losing it is not the end of the world becaus eif you lose it then it wasn't the right one
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by tinkerbellsas | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS IS ENCREDIBLY SAD. BUT I HOPE YOU NEVER DO THIS. NO ONE IS WORTH KIILING YOUSELF FOR. BELIEVE ME I KNOW. I'VE HAD HEARTBREAK LIKE THIS TOO. AND MOST OF US HAVE. BUT I PROMISE YOU, YOU CAN GET OVER IT.. JUST TALK TO SOMEONE YOU CAN TRUST. IT WILL REALLY HELP!
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      this is extreemly well written and your not alone we all have this curse its a part of being drugg through life. good write my son and dont give in to this horrible feeling hell if no one could get through this feeling we'd be extinct by now

    much love
    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]


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