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Oedipus


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 88
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Okay this is the poem i wrote for a Honors 10 English assignment. I'll tell you what i get on it if you tell me what you think lol. But seriously tell me what you think anyways.


Oedipus



Oedips, Oedipus
doomed from birth
was a hero in the beginning
for all it's worth

Tried best to figure out
The prophecy unfulfilled
and what really happened
when Laius was killed

Oh Oedipus, Oedipus
from birth you were doomed
for your wife had a dark secret
and evil still loomed

For your birth right
was like no other
it was to kill your father
and marry your mother

Oh Oedipus, poor Oedipus
eyes now blood red
exiled from Thebes
soon to be dead




Submitted on 2005-12-13 21:30:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is very interesting, I've never read Oedipus so I liked how even to someone who's never read the play could understand what it was about. Sounds like a pretty wierd play. I would improve working on details and description...you just kind of listed what happened, one tip is to use the five senses...smell, touch, you know. Colours is an easy thing to start with, I compliment you for using "blood red", now go ahead and use more! Good job!

PS: Thanks for the comment on "Rape of Juliet", chocolate ice-cream is awesome, by the way.
| Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by travwell | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah i think u captured the play very well. one of my favorite parts of the play was when teiresious told him he was to blame and is ass went into denial. i think u got an A on this one
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  now that is a very very wonerful poem , a classic turned into a poem with such a wonderful way , no i find that very well done.. and i enjoyed it , thanks for sharing it and keep sending more :)
| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
  i hated that play. and liked it at the same time. the poking eyes out thing-groooooosss!
great poem though! its very oedipus-y, sad and gloomy. nice work, it sounds like an english assignment.
| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by lola47 | [ Reply to This ]


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