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Gatsby


Author: AngelOutlaw
ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
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Class/Type: Misc /Comedy
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wrote this after finishing an Honors American Literature test on The Great Gatsby. Enjoy. All comments welcome.


Gatsby



A constant scratching.
"Tink" of metal against wood.
A droning hum.
"Crinkle" of abundant papers.

My head throbs,
My eyes ache.
Consciously unclenching my hand.
Forcing myself to not think.

Still breathing heavily,
Face flushed as ever.
Fidgeting nervously,
Counting the minutes.

I don't understand -
I shouldn't be so anxious.
Sit up straight, stretch.
Wish I could walk around.

What's wrong with me?
The test is over!




Submitted on 2005-12-13 22:14:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  LOL! Been there! I take night classes and I can never get to sleep after taking a test. We also read Gatsby in our lit theory class (I read it a very long time ago). Nice work.

Peace,

Joe
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  i thought this was actually gonna be about gatsby. that was a good ass book. i love the way gatsby talks. this was cool. i didn't know what u were talking about til the end
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey this was great. I love it when people write about simple personal things, that people can usually relate to. It was just like..."yep, I so now how that goes".

But it was such good description and words that really made this poem wonderful.

It's great...good job

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is really neato, a little moment in time captured perfectly with words...not much else to say, very well done in my humble opinion, makes me stress just thinking about it, I hate tests,lol, nice job

Milo
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Milo shanley | [ Reply to This ]


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