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    dots Submission Name: my life in rhymedots

    Author: ClaraHa
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 5/10/3
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 723
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       im not so sure, maybe if you say it quickly

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    dotsmy life in rhymedots

    I disagree
    Who was he?

    Never free
    one of three
    pain in knee
    a guarantee

    never will be
    a nominee
    for Jeopardy

    Family tree
    a sight to see
    an absentee

    time to flee
    you got me?

    Submitted on 2005-12-13 22:39:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ay oh...turn the headphones up...less bass, ay oh turn the treble up to 52. nah 54, 54!

    ay oh, I see you questioning exactly "who was he"? I speak the truth in subtle volumes peep the six degrees of my fluency, it's truancy cuz I ain't present I ain't showin up, Im only showin off and your sick cuz now you throwin up, Im blowin up find a flame kid and spark the wick, Im in my brothers shadow like my name was marcus vick, spark the fire of desire let it bleed in surreal patterns let's dream of change tomorrow, cuz today our hope is shattered
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by FosterKid | [ Reply to This ]
      short and concise. a thought that does not need to reech it`s target directly.A poem will do it just perfectly.

    D` Alin
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by DAlin | [ Reply to This ]
      nice very original ..the rhyme id amazing ..
    but you know dome part make me confuse
    but it's a good poem keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]

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