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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Another day,
Come and gone-
I go to my safe house,
My bed of dreams,
Where all i seem to dream of-
Is fairytales and happy endings,
you and me together
like how it used to be
how it could have been-
If only...
If only-
I love you,
I swear I still do!
I miss you everyday...
More and more,
Everyday-
But,
All I have left,
is memories,
and wishes of what could have been-
But deep down i know,
It'll never be more
than just a dream,
just a memory
just a vision-
That everyday,
gets
further
and further
away-
Like a cloud drifting away with the wind-
So do the dreams-
And every night i pray
that this is real-
Cuz i luv u
and i always will.




Submitted on 2005-12-14 01:38:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The way you keep repeating things at some points kept me reading. I enjoyed it, it does seem as many people could relate.
So write more!
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Fadeintoreality | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is a subject matter where just about anyone can relate to so it's not really an original subject but even so whether or not its original its true and you did a good job of baring your feelings on the matter. I'm not sure I liked the format but the wording was excellent. Nicely done MDP.

Kuddos,
Jermaine.
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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