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    dots Submission Name: Particularshard pt. 3dots

    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 335
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       In the words of the immortal beavis and butthead show, its a sick sad world, and sometimes I feel really bad for being a part of it...

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    dotsParticularshard pt. 3dots

    There's a part of me -
    In my heart that's free,
    But the light that it shines is dimmed
    By the start of need -
    To somehow make a way in this world
    To not die in the same
    Position in which I curled
    As a fetus when I was hurled
    Ready for the world's consumption
    Like a blunt that's been pearled -
    A foregone assumption
    But this world won't smoke me
    God forbid they choke me
    And take away what's mine like
    They did to the Hopi
    Cloak me
    In the rags
    Of lambskin
    And drag
    My beliefs through the dirt
    Like my enemies do the flag
    They can't take what I have!
    Neither Osama or W -
    So easy to trouble you
    When I'm popping like bubbles do
    But I don't give double doo -
    That means two shits,
    About the reactions or actions
    That you have from two lips
    I should have two dicks
    For the size of my balls
    I'll get a rise out you all
    And then laugh when you fall
    I'm the bastard that calls
    The ER
    From my car -
    Saying I just left the bar
    And I got the pedal pressed hard
    I'm a Particularshard -
    We're both part of the same
    I'm the lion with mane,
    Are you the pussy with shame?
    And I don't mean from a dame
    I mean you're somebody's pet
    And haven't figured it yet -
    You think you can win the bet -
    Somehow end up wealthy?
    Or exercise enough that you then felt healthy?
    No -
    You can feel the sickness
    And even stand witness
    While you know that its wrong -
    Thoughts pass in a quickness
    And you get back to business -
    Dog eat dog -
    Rats race amongst the hate
    And the hogs treat hogs
    Like the next new Farmer,
    Afterall its an Animal Farm
    Beg Jesus for no Karma
    Even we animals feel harm....

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      Been a while since I've read any poems or commented on anything. But this one was definitely a good one to start with. The rhyme scheme-as always- was impeccable. And the phrase double doo made me smile...Great flow, great poem...
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]

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