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All is All

Author:	PoetPhilosopher
ASL Info:	17. Male. Michigan.
Elite Ratio:	3 - 6 /13 /4
Words:	141

Class/Type:	Poetry /Serious
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Another Philisophical Poem, reflect, interpret, critique, anything. the more the better.

All is All

Where does this world go, and how does this life lead
Us predictable people in this beautiful world?
And how does this life show, the golden light streets
That brings us all to the same thing? A question.
A question of answers in some book collection,
To guide us through all, of answers and questions,
Is a world of life, that we dwell upon now,
To show we don't know where to go, but capable of knowing how.
Is what we feel all depending, on a mysterious celestial serenity?
Or is what we feel just is, and we create our own mystery?
The point of life lies within one, and ones mind lies within life.
And living is never done, never ends, and never dies.

Submitted on 2005-12-14 10:08:06 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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First of all, welcome to the site and thanks for your comment on my "The Nature of Time".

This is an interesting piece, one of those that asks questions without necessarily providing answers. It's purpose is to ponder and to share the pondering with the reader. You've done a good job of provoking thought.

I had a bit of trouble parsing your sentences into thoughts. You might want to break things up a bit closer to the lines of the thoughts you're expressing. I've played a bit with your words here. Please take this as an alternate, complimentary interpretation, rather than "How you should have done it":

"Where does this world go?

How does this life lead us,
Predictable people in this beautiful world?

How does this life show the golden light streets
Bringing us all to the same thing?

A question...
A question of answers in some book collection,

To guide us through all,
of answers and questions.
is a world of life, that we dwell upon now,

To show we don't know where to go,
But are capable of knowing how.

Is what we feel all dependent on a mysterious celestial serenity?

Or is what we feel just it,
And we create our own mystery?

The point of life lies within one,
One's mind lies within life.
And living is never done,
Never ends,

Never dies."

My idea is to force the reader to pause, make them ponder your thoughts.

Keep up the good work,
Steve

| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]

Creating our own mystery and yes, even sometimes misery.
I liked the format of this one and you encourage the reader with some interesting questions. I believe "IT" is inside and we are a reflection ALL.
Great!
Love,Peace,Joy~Feel,Experience,BE!
tif

| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

This is soooooo cool. You really are a great philosopher. Yes, this is soooo true. I've really got nothing to say about this except its nice, good, great, cool...

MY FAVOURITES ITS IN!

| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]

this was great your opinion on all to do with life is very well spoken i am surprised you havent got more comments
great post
sandman

| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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