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    dots Submission Name: Procrastinationdots
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    Author: thetwilight
    ASL Info:    23/F/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 81/68/15
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 850
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 613



    Description:
       Just a little piece on the procrastination thought process set in early morning.


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    White room
    White cold
    Placid room
    Burning sun is
    Peaking in
    Say Hello
    Say Goodbye

    Say “Maybe today”.

    Sky is struggling
    Under the covers
    Shades of consciousness
    Come in colors
    The phone is sterile
    The walls bleed tangerine.

    Say “Maybe tomarrow”.

    Dreams begin to die
    As the light grows
    Strength
    Petty distraction pollutes air
    Wind blows need in
    Through the window.
    The spirit rests
    With the day.

    Say “Maybe never”.




    Submitted on 2005-12-14 11:15:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Say 'why do today what you can put off till tomorrow'...HA! Very simple description of the procrastination art. Funny how we let the petty distractions like you say allow us to put off things we should do. Another nice piece.

    Oh, and WELCOME!
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty good. i could definitely picture myself lying in my bed knowing damn well i have something to do, but always putting it off to tomorrow. great write. welcome to elite
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful poem. The use of wording gives nice imagery to the reader.

    But as I say to everyone there is always room to improve yourself, keep writing and you will get better.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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