Procrastination by thetwilight

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Submission Name: Procrastination dots

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Author:	thetwilight
ASL Info:	23/F/Ca
Elite Ratio:	3.4 - 81/68/15
Words:	75

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	856
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	613

Description:
Just a little piece on the procrastination thought process set in early morning.

Procrastination dots

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White room
White cold
Placid room
Burning sun is
Peaking in
Say Hello
Say Goodbye

Say “Maybe today”.

Sky is struggling
Under the covers
Shades of consciousness
Come in colors
The phone is sterile
The walls bleed tangerine.

Say “Maybe tomarrow”.

Dreams begin to die
As the light grows
Strength
Petty distraction pollutes air
Wind blows need in
Through the window.
The spirit rests
With the day.

Say “Maybe never”.

Submitted on 2005-12-14 11:15:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Say 'why do today what you can put off till tomorrow'...HA! Very simple description of the procrastination art. Funny how we let the petty distractions like you say allow us to put off things we should do. Another nice piece.

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| Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  this is pretty good. i could definitely picture myself lying in my bed knowing damn well i have something to do, but always putting it off to tomorrow. great write. welcome to elite
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a wonderful poem. The use of wording gives nice imagery to the reader.

But as I say to everyone there is always room to improve yourself, keep writing and you will get better.
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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