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    dots Submission Name: Walkin Halo Talkin SHE "IT"dots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 754
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       Listening to old CCR (Credence) and I took a random comment sheet from one of my ES poems and was inspired to "spit IT", if you will....<@> added a drawing in pen that wound, with the words, around the page.
    It was fun to write and me oh my...endings up in "IT"....he he he
    Enjoy Life and Merry Christmas ~
    Love,Peace,JOY ~ Feel,Experience,BE!!!

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWalkin Halo Talkin SHE "IT"dots

    Walkin Halo
    Talkin Shit +)
    Yeah, ALL "IT"
    they don't
    Want U
    2 "GET"?!

    Better start
    Birdie ~*~
    if you want
    a hit
    or a toke in
    a pill &
    a kit...
    the world's in
    pain & havin
    a fit
    Politic with religion
    they live
    in Heaven
    most in their
    EconoME'z callin
    Mideastern a Brit
    it's your turn
    2 lay down
    our turn 2 sit

    The tear at the
    split - - -
    Sunrise cock
    in hand
    needy mouth
    on TIT (*) (*)
    Left says swallow
    right 2 spit?!

    I'm gettin
    ALL Basic ~
    Let Chaos
    2 Quit -->

    "IT" says
    Flame Up
    We Show
    LIT ~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    Submitted on 2005-12-14 11:48:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoy your inventiveness, Tiffany. It always brings me pleasure. Haven't heard any Credence in a while but I have the memories. Thanks for the feel good feeling. - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-12-13 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      how i can read something so... (oh what the hell's the word for it?) unique(?), and feel like i've read a novel? got to come back to your page soon, you've got a lot of posts, and i take forever to write one friggin comment.
    but not to worry, eventually...
    peace out.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by ghostknight | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this Tiff. Upbeat unique as only you can be in presentation and speaks of your feeling on serious subject politics. Risky but it works for you in this poem. `always write poetry, Cheryl
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah. this definitely could've been a rap. it was really tight and it's definitely going on my fave list. i enjoyed the whole thing. it was very...you i guess. i didn't understand most of it though
    | Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that's great, it makes very little sense overall and I think that's what I love about it...

    It's different too, I can't say I have seen this style used so effectively before.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by ZXDPrince | [ Reply to This ]
      that was great lol i love it! it sounds like something me and my friends would write when we're really hyper! great [censored], great [censored]! *chuckles*
    | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by sinister_always | [ Reply to This ]
      love, love, love it. it's always good to smoke the sh "it". Funny and deep, this piece is fuk-in it! :)
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't really know if I would consider this a rap. More like a poem with a "hop". I was kinda lost with the "IT" thing...

    I'm sorry! I don't like being argumentive of someones work!

    *curls up*

    Don't hit me! LMFAO!

    This was unique. You had a rant going on here. I just couldn't find a consistant "rhythm" that would have put it along the lines of a "rap".


    On the flip side...this was great as a muse in itself!

    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okayyyy, bit different than the normal (?) Tiff writing we usually see. It's nice to venture out. You did good. You even caused my brow to rise in parts of this write, and a slight giggle.
    You got it going on in this write. I'll leave the political comments out. I don't usually get into those. But you have quite of way of doing so yourself..

    I enjoyed!
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

    Thank you so much. I wondered why the rap didn't get many comments. I guess because it's reality. I never seen a rap or rhyme writting in your style or flow. I truly understand where you are coming from and the political stand point. Your rhymes were brief and to the point. My hat is off to you on this one. Like ricky said in boys-n-the hood but rephrased. Your rhymes has more cakes than duncan hines.
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much enjoy your work, it is very clever in my honest opinion. I need to take the time to read more of your works, you are by far one of my favorites.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      I've seen everything now, a Tiff rap-sody!

    Neat take, Princess, and enough "Tiffisms" in there to identify it as your property.

    Very earthy, too, like rap should be.

    Nice, real nice, you mah ho!

    be Rappy

    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha! hee hee! Ohhh, geez I found this to be so much fun! This is a bit different from what I usually read from you and may I say, thanks for the smile!

    Sunrise cock
    in hand
    needy mouth
    on TIT (*) (*)
    Left says swallow
    right 2 spit?!

    Ok...I think that just about sums it up dontcha think? hahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaaa! This is like a rap song with erotic, explicit content hee hee! You have been officially banned from Walmart! hahahaa! Thanks for puting a smile on my face with this one. haha! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Umm...did I ever say, nice TITs, hee-hee! Yeah, I can see this here as an echo of spiritually Ragin'A.T.M. yet not enough to slaughter it from total existence because IT needs the 'US'(A) to survive despite its despise of "IT". Funny how the more you seem to describe "IT" the more people 'claim' to know of "IT" and be in "ITS" existence, but after a period of time you realize they just dont get "IT". Hee-Hee...lil goodness she-devil you are...and thats a rarity.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Very hip and original. The middle part was superbly put together. It just added enough to make it a very good and sexy rap.

    Well done the queen of rap !
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really unique. i havent seen a verse written in this style before, and by reading the name i didnt really understand what it was going to be about, but after finishing it i can understand. oh and thanks for reading my piece. but yea keep it up

    - kase
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      heya this is deeeefinitely different. i liked the morning sex scene cuz that is my morning just about every day... lmao. but the style is different, i did something similar a while back but i lost it, so i guess that doesnt count, huh?
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by prettygrnEyes | [ Reply to This ]
      This is totally creative I absolutely love this!
    The style is homebred & works!

    You should totally try this again. Maybe it can be you're calling card.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]
      This is IT
    I think i understand the capitols for IT now
    Extremely Clever
    You are very talented
    I really enjoyed reading this
    I will definately without a doubt be looking for your clever mind
    In future writes
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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