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    dots Submission Name: Americadots
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    Author: cannibal
    ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 47/47/15
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 867
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    Bytes: 616



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       well this about how the american people have not really seen horable things when it comes to war...or at least this generation hasn't. yeah tell me what you think.


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    dotsAmericadots
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    A day is gone
    another pain to suffer
    another person to kill

    we belong to the deep
    the torment of sleep
    how we lose time so easily
    the horror of humanity

    Be still
    be silent
    you must wait patiently
    make something out of yourself
    be someone before it drags you still
    live your life in solitude and peace
    the wave will never bring you to the deep

    so be happy
    be happy
    watch that sorrow from a distant seat
    hope that the wind of change never caress your cheek.




    Submitted on 2005-12-14 16:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is deep
    I believe you were talking about how a lot of people here in America are only happy with themselves when they see others fall
    It is a form of jealousy actually
    And it is very sad
    Thanks for opening up some eyes with this one
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This seems a little bit forced and a little bit un formatted. I like the anger behind it. It is full of rage. The imagery is okay. It reminds me of the news every morning. All the deaths and things reported every day.
    Briannan
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]


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