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America


Author: cannibal
ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 47 /47 /15
Words: 110
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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well this about how the american people have not really seen horable things when it comes to war...or at least this generation hasn't. yeah tell me what you think.


America


A day is gone
another pain to suffer
another person to kill

we belong to the deep
the torment of sleep
how we lose time so easily
the horror of humanity

Be still
be silent
you must wait patiently
make something out of yourself
be someone before it drags you still
live your life in solitude and peace
the wave will never bring you to the deep

so be happy
be happy
watch that sorrow from a distant seat
hope that the wind of change never caress your cheek.




Submitted on 2005-12-14 16:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is deep
I believe you were talking about how a lot of people here in America are only happy with themselves when they see others fall
It is a form of jealousy actually
And it is very sad
Thanks for opening up some eyes with this one
Your Friend
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This seems a little bit forced and a little bit un formatted. I like the anger behind it. It is full of rage. The imagery is okay. It reminds me of the news every morning. All the deaths and things reported every day.
Briannan
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]


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