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    dots Submission Name: Outdots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsOutdots
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    girl locked in
    in a room
    with no way out
    all she wants is out

    people are yelling
    wrists are bleeding
    mind is blasting
    all she wants is out

    spiriling down
    into oblivion
    tourchered by all
    all she wants is out

    captured by spirits
    enforced by demons
    caught in death
    all she wants is out

    feeling so lost
    stuck in pain
    no one cares
    all she wants is out

    death is close
    she sees the gun
    so inviting
    all she wants is out

    holds the gun
    to her head
    pulls the trigger
    finally, she is out.




    Submitted on 2004-04-25 22:47:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is pretty cool i like it quite a bit, i think its sad though and i hope you don't feel this way. i like the repition and i love the first stanza really good thanks for sharing
    Crymson Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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