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The Knowledge which you Seek


Author: darkness
ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524 /218 /40
Words: 209
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Well this is writtem for my lil bro. Uthmaan.

what can i say. I come from a family full of power hungry maniacs.


The Knowledge which you Seek



The Knowledge which you seek is useless,
never-ending
it blackens thy soul
and kills thy heart

The wielders of this knowledge
are only the cruel, evil like despots
power hungry in their cause
dominating as ever

The evil they do cannot be stated
an eye for an eye
a soul for a soul
their thoughts so cold

DO NOT let thy curiosity prevail thee
for the knowledge which you seek is harmful,
corrupting in thy mind
becoming in thy soul
separating families
masdaral lil ithim
the source of sin

My curiosity succumbs me
please tell me so
why
Oh why would they do such an evil thing?!!?

The knowledge which you seek i shall not tell thee
for it is a burden to carry
harmful, as its consequences are dire
brought to this world as a trial
a test


their jelousy so strong
their ways so vile
O I shall kill them so...

Please do not desire so
close thy eyes and let it go
mention thy Lord He'll ease thee
from this horrid plight

My heart is at rest but I still need to know
exactly who and why.......





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  Kool. But i am not a power hungry maniac. Maybe a future evil despot.

| Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Uthmaan | [ Reply to This ]
  DUDE I LOVE THIS PART SOOO MUCH :
DO NOT let thy curiosity prevail thee
for the knowledge which you seek is harmful,
corrupting in thy mind
becoming in thy soul
separating families
masdaral lil ithim
the source of sin

It is soooo true because we all want to know things and we all want to have a part or have apiece of the knoledge that this Earth hold but not all of it is for the good. We all feel like that... you know?
It's kinda weird how we want to know what is not good for us.

< Unperfect 3
| Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
  I LIKE THIS ONNNNE. Mannn woman, i lubbb your poems cuz they're so different from the way others write their poems. It rocks, yo.

You said it was about magic, but it could really be anything you want it to be.

WOW!

GO YOU!Hahahahahahah.
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a terrific write and I love the opening. Normally I’m not fond of archaic language but as an imaginary dragon it suits your style well. The misuse of power seems to be prevalent at the moment. George Bush springs to my mind. I’m not sure if there are typing errors or deliberate defiant spellings. I’ll go with the first and you can let me know if I’m wrong. Spelling corrections in brackets.

The Knowledge which you seek is useless,
(never-ending)
it blackens thy soul
and kills thy heart.

The (wielders) of this knowledge
are only the cruel, evil like despots
power hungry in their cause
(dominating) as ever.

I wouldn't bother with 'the' and 'like'

The (wielders) of this knowledge
are only cruel, evil despots

The evil they do cannot be stated
an eye for an eye
a soul for a soul
their thoughts so cold

DO NOT let thy curiosity prevail thee
for the knowledge which you seek is harmful,
corrupting in thy mind
(becoming) in thy soul
(separating) families

masdaral lil ithim
I don’t understand this line.

the source of sin

My curiosity succumbs me
please tell me so
why
Oh why would they do such an evil thing?!?

The knowledge (which) you seek i shall not tell thee
for it is a burden to carry
harmful, as its (consequences) are dire
brought to this world as a trial
a test


their (jealousy) so strong
their ways so vile
O I shall kill them so

Please do not desire so
close thy eyes and let it go
mention thy Lord He'll ease thee
from this horrid plight

My heart is at (rest) but I still need to know
exactly who and why...

Please stay in touch
Comradenessie
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
  WHOA, that is all I have to say...WHOA! I'm adding this to my favorites. Definately my kind of write, lol. This was really good and your flow was awesome. Keep it up!
| Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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