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    dots Submission Name: The Knowledge which you Seekdots
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    Author: darkness
    ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524/218/40
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Well this is writtem for my lil bro. Uthmaan.

    what can i say. I come from a family full of power hungry maniacs.


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    dotsThe Knowledge which you Seekdots
    -------------------------------------------


    The Knowledge which you seek is useless,
    never-ending
    it blackens thy soul
    and kills thy heart

    The wielders of this knowledge
    are only the cruel, evil like despots
    power hungry in their cause
    dominating as ever

    The evil they do cannot be stated
    an eye for an eye
    a soul for a soul
    their thoughts so cold

    DO NOT let thy curiosity prevail thee
    for the knowledge which you seek is harmful,
    corrupting in thy mind
    becoming in thy soul
    separating families
    masdaral lil ithim
    the source of sin

    My curiosity succumbs me
    please tell me so
    why
    Oh why would they do such an evil thing?!!?

    The knowledge which you seek i shall not tell thee
    for it is a burden to carry
    harmful, as its consequences are dire
    brought to this world as a trial
    a test


    their jelousy so strong
    their ways so vile
    O I shall kill them so...

    Please do not desire so
    close thy eyes and let it go
    mention thy Lord He'll ease thee
    from this horrid plight

    My heart is at rest but I still need to know
    exactly who and why.......





    Submitted on 2005-12-14 17:49:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Kool. But i am not a power hungry maniac. Maybe a future evil despot.

    | Posted on 2007-01-16 00:00:00 | by Uthmaan | [ Reply to This ]
      DUDE I LOVE THIS PART SOOO MUCH :
    DO NOT let thy curiosity prevail thee
    for the knowledge which you seek is harmful,
    corrupting in thy mind
    becoming in thy soul
    separating families
    masdaral lil ithim
    the source of sin

    It is soooo true because we all want to know things and we all want to have a part or have apiece of the knoledge that this Earth hold but not all of it is for the good. We all feel like that... you know?
    It's kinda weird how we want to know what is not good for us.

    < Unperfect 3
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
      I LIKE THIS ONNNNE. Mannn woman, i lubbb your poems cuz they're so different from the way others write their poems. It rocks, yo.

    You said it was about magic, but it could really be anything you want it to be.

    WOW!

    GO YOU!Hahahahahahah.
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a terrific write and I love the opening. Normally Iím not fond of archaic language but as an imaginary dragon it suits your style well. The misuse of power seems to be prevalent at the moment. George Bush springs to my mind. Iím not sure if there are typing errors or deliberate defiant spellings. Iíll go with the first and you can let me know if Iím wrong. Spelling corrections in brackets.

    The Knowledge which you seek is useless,
    (never-ending)
    it blackens thy soul
    and kills thy heart.

    The (wielders) of this knowledge
    are only the cruel, evil like despots
    power hungry in their cause
    (dominating) as ever.

    I wouldn't bother with 'the' and 'like'

    The (wielders) of this knowledge
    are only cruel, evil despots

    The evil they do cannot be stated
    an eye for an eye
    a soul for a soul
    their thoughts so cold

    DO NOT let thy curiosity prevail thee
    for the knowledge which you seek is harmful,
    corrupting in thy mind
    (becoming) in thy soul
    (separating) families

    masdaral lil ithim
    I donít understand this line.

    the source of sin

    My curiosity succumbs me
    please tell me so
    why
    Oh why would they do such an evil thing?!?

    The knowledge (which) you seek i shall not tell thee
    for it is a burden to carry
    harmful, as its (consequences) are dire
    brought to this world as a trial
    a test


    their (jealousy) so strong
    their ways so vile
    O I shall kill them so

    Please do not desire so
    close thy eyes and let it go
    mention thy Lord He'll ease thee
    from this horrid plight

    My heart is at (rest) but I still need to know
    exactly who and why...

    Please stay in touch
    Comradenessie
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
      WHOA, that is all I have to say...WHOA! I'm adding this to my favorites. Definately my kind of write, lol. This was really good and your flow was awesome. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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