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    dots Submission Name: Witchesdots
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    Author: cannibal
    ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 47/47/15
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 738
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    Description:
       when i was in high school I took a myth class and read in one of the books about these women who were under a gods spell and they danced, sang, killed beasts untill some god (i don't remember the name of these people it was long ago.) punished the god who cast a spell on the women. Yeah looong discription I know.


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    dotsWitchesdots
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    With trust we run through wild wood
    With glowing eye and haunted mind

    it has blinded our site
    but we are so happy with that nothingness

    We scream at beasts
    with claws we eat
    and savagely we creep.
    Oh, the sins of the deep

    We sing under night sky a harsh lullaby to
    the beasts that do not believe

    We dance round fire with burning feet,
    the immortal desire to drink the blood of man or beast.




    Submitted on 2005-12-14 18:25:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this one however if your feet burn while danceing around the fire than you have not gained selfmastery i'm in a rush but i will come back to your others keep working
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by papalegba | [ Reply to This ]
      it is a little strange but that doesn't matter. You use the word beast a little to much, and it doesn't really seem to have any clear direction. But i think that if you modifyed it a little and maybe added on to the end than it would be much more effective, but it shows some promise.
    ~Shadow
    sorry to be so brutal, but i am just trying to help.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]


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