The Last Rain Shower -------------------------------------------
Rain begets rain:
bullets meet flesh
as blood sullies land.
The victim's mother weeps
in December sleet
as she recalls earlier words
their exclamation points
cutting her son to shreds.
Now they lacerate her heart;
she wondered what would happen
if everyone in the world
opened their eye taps at once.
Would we wash the blood away?
Would we drown or learn to swim?
Because only the willfully blind
think the flood ended with Noah.
this is truly poignant. my image is not so much of war but of gangs and mindless killing of our youth. i like the colors this poem ignites - even shoots - in front of my eyes, bursts of bright red, and then i am relieved with the watercolor of tears always the maternal archetype heals with hers... miriam
Wow, this is poignant, no other word for it fits. many of your writes do fit this idea. The use of punctuation to emulate bullets and rain for blood, that's really interesting.
It makes me want to know the understory of the mother and son, hmmm don't the exclaimations look like nails in hands? Or is your that just where my mind is going? Did the fall set up a struggle that was never really valid?
And the controversy, and human strife, it's never stopped. Beautiful job Amy I think I could look at this one again.
this is brilliant Amy. your images are so sharp and cutting,. i am kind of speechless on this one. i've come back and read it quite a few times, and it leaves its mark.. it's powerful, and your last lines pack the punch.
i'm surprised you haven't gotten many comments on this.. it's a stunner.
Bloody hell. Wow. Speechless. I love it. I especially loved the line "because only the willfully blind think the flood ended with Noah" Which is incredibly well written. I struggle to find anything wrong. Well done.
Words can't describe what this made me feel inside. I like the idea of talking about a victim's mother in the December sleet. I can't imagine what Jade's parents and Chris's parents are going through during this holiday season. Or J.B.'s family. This just really made me think about life and all that has happened. I don't really know much else to say about it. It was unique and great all in one. Favorite.
This seems to be an anti-war piece.. one many of us can relate to at this point in time I'm sure. There isn't much more to say but this was a wonderful write and this was a very unique way of expressing your feelings:
because only the willfully blind think the flood ended with Noah