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    dots Submission Name: the girldots

    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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       this was for a class assignment...
    who wants to guess where the sparkles shimmers shines line is stolen from :P

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    dotsthe girldots

    The girl with stars in her eyes.
    She sparkles, shimmers, shines.

    Scattered thoughts caress the naked mind.
    Breathe ideas through the mouth.

    Emotions bleed honest and true.
    Cutting the deepest stitch in the heart.

    Something with meaning beyond meaning.
    An existence to change the world.

    Blindly when any traces are gone.
    Keeping the smile in times of retreat.

    Appreciation like any other person would.
    Connection to the other souls of this earth.

    Beauty amidst incessant pain.
    Light in the darkest of days.

    The spirit in humanity that incessantly gives.
    Bravery that erupts in the hearts of the loyal.

    Those with intentions for harm.
    Hypocrisy in all its forms.

    The eyes of a liar unexposed.
    The empty feeling of loneliness.

    With all of my being, a passionate affection.
    Fully, deeply, freely, without restraint.

    The girl with the moon in her eyes.
    She sparkles, shimmers, shines.

    Submitted on 2005-12-14 21:49:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i don't know...i think i am so used to reading poetry about pain hat i must know good poetry...i'm good at analizing but i think this was alittle...weird for me to read. Having nothing to do with pain what-so-ever...overall tho it was pretty good tho. I wish you luck on better pieces to come...i'm going to look at some more of your stuff and see how you write.
    I liked the set up of this with the one word trailing the two lines...thats a good way to write and yet i've seen few use it...
    Much love and good luck.
    Au Revoir,
    P.S. Check out some of my poetry sometime...I recomend my featured work...sometimes. lol
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      pritty good girlie. well at least a b plus anyway huh? don't know where the line is from but i like it.. keep on keepin on hun
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
      hope you got an A. I liked this very much. Although, I couldn't guess where the lines sparkles shimmers shines are stolen from... I especially like the ending about the girl with the moon in her eyes.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

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