A Nutrient Called Faith -------------------------------------------
She squeezed stones;
people called her an idiot.
She squeezed turnips too;
they scoffed and scoffed
until she crushed a rock
to powder in her dainty hand
as it disintegrated
an idea rose like a vapor
in her misunderstood mind,
a thought that bore fruits
of happiness and wealth.
Now they squeezed stones and turnips
until arthritis seized their hands
but she had the secret ingredient--
a nutrient called faith,
and she snickered
until her face looked
like a mountie's jacket,
but she only clapped with one hand.
i think this poem is awesomn, it was interesting different, meaningfull. i enjoyed this alot. the starting and the ending were both perfect, and pretty much thruought the whole poem too haha. i just really liked it, havent read a good poem like this for awhile, this unique and well put, so im going to go read your other work. thankyou char
i found this poem really interesting. i like the comparisons u make, like with ideas and vapors. it was a unique way to show the power faith can have. i found it also illustrates how society takes after trends that they had even looked down on before. it was, overall, a really good theme that one can not accomplish their goals without faith. i'm not sure if there's anything u could do to improve it. i really like it how it is and think that changing it around might take away from the meaning.
For myself, faith is a terribly loaded word. One I actually have tattooed on my right arm along with "heart" and "skill". Religous connatations aside (I for one don't have any) I think it's one of the most important (and potentialy dangerous) things in the world.
All skill resides within the assumption of its possibility but without the others you can find any task to be very daunting. You can toss a glass of water at a rock, shrug, and say "Well that did nothing" then turn and find yourself before a great canyon.
The single hand clapping line at the end made me laugh heartily. It was a simple thing that at a glance could be seen as cliché but explodes in a rain of ember-like possibilities with a thought.
That was insainly powerful thinking, I mean wow... I don't know what to say it is so good. I guess like my friend her, Mieko I shall add it to my Favs list. Back to the point though I don't know what I'd change... maybe not anything, or maybe something so big it's not obvious who knows. Anyway awesome write. THNX
I agree with everything about this write I for one believe that ones Belief in A higher Power can carry them to all there Dreams For Me It was God But no matter what others beliefs are They can still find happiness In Faith Excellently Worded Loved This Your Friend Ron
what a wonderful story of pain and suffering being overcome by faith and perseverance...the one hand line caught me way off guard and made me think about all those kung fu movies i y=used to whatch were the teacher will say osomething of the like if a tree falls in the forest and no-one is there to hear it does it make a sound?...this was beautiful...thank you, i would like to know what it means to you!
This is a very good poem. I like how you have described the powers of faith in this poem. The compare and contrast of her and the people who didnt have faith is very good. It really shows how powerful it is just to believe. This is very inspiring to read and makes quite a good statement with its message here. Funny how faith cant be seen or touched, only felt from within yet so very powerful to the inner and outer existance of one's self. It is all in how you perceive things and if you have a strong faith, it changes a potentially negative view into hope. Very good write. Take care.
Sometimes faith is all it takes to move on. Faith is all it takes to reach a goal you are wanting. I believe hypocritical people that don't believe in faith but want the same rewards that faith offers are the worst. I like this because it's showing that fact. The flow was really well and I also enjoyed the ending. How she snickered at them for not knowing her nutrient called faith. :) Good job sis. <3 Bethany
Ohhh inspiring! I liked the end, where she didn't stop squeezing those stones, and how the power of faith is strongly displayed. I just read your journal about your grannies cancer, and in a way, it seemed connected... with the whole faith thing, and fighting cancer... Have faith, things will work out. -Andrya
...That's really interesting. Saying what power one has when one truely believes. ...In fact, you know what? It's too cool for me to not read again, later. So it's going in my favorites--also known as bookmarks.