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    dots Submission Name: Autodots
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    Author: Aaron Felix
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 162/183/93
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Dreams again.


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    dotsAutodots
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    I know that you dream often of
    future events and happenings.
    which is why I would tell you
    I wrote this poem in the dark.

    Only a windblown delusion
    cascading towards an end
    I never wanted to consider
    headlights at the end of a tunnel
    mangle tangle of dead wires
    or brake fluid eating away
    the cuffs of my jeans

    did I ever tell you how to
    write the encyclopedia
    on a toothpick?
    because listen
    listen
    my eternity is an
    endless cycle of
    you screaming
    to a wheel
    and you
    breathing-a
    malfunctioning
    soul
    keep the cold from my spine




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      It makes me think of ... an accident. Broken glass. Flashing lights. A problem unsolved, because of lack of sight.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2006-01-09 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem doesn't make any sense to me. It doesn't follow through on any of the ideas it suggests. It is bouncing around as if in a manic state.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by psychoneurosis | [ Reply to This ]


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