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    dots Submission Name: 2 Much Time Without Youdots
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    Author: uncommon_flu
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 16/18/13
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1629
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 231



    Description:
       short sweet love poem, anybody can share with their loved ones. GO AHEAD!!! SHARE THE WEALTH


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    dots2 Much Time Without Youdots
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    2 days seemed
    2 last
    2 weeks without you
    2 weeks quickly became
    2 years without you, so since this
    2 year weekend i have come
    2 realize that
    2 days is
    2 much time without you




    Submitted on 2005-12-15 09:00:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      2 cool. Ignore those who gripe about the 2's. Its clever, short and sweet. It made me smile and as a misserable jerk I hate to smile. I'll get you for that! (lol)
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent write about having 2 much time on your hands when your loved one is away ('2 year weekend'? Must have been rough!). I can't imagine any way to improve this, it certainly doesn't need to be lengthened or revised, and the repeated use of 2s was a clever way to unify such a brief poem. Nicely done. Wish you the best. Bill.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      omg i loved this poem. i can see where alot of people are gonna be like to many 2s! but i totally love it and the flow it creates as well as the visual of it. i also like how it starts and progresses longer and longer then comes back to only having been 2 days. i can totally relate to the feeling. plus i compleatly understand line 6, it ties directly into line 7. i like also how the 2s are used for more than just the number 2 but also for the words, to, and too. just wonderful i loved it!
    -jon
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by jbb360 | [ Reply to This ]
      with the exeption of all the 2's, this was a good poem. most people would just focus on the 2's, but i liked the feeling behind it. it shows that you can miss and love someone so much and it can be translated into something so simple. in fact, too simple, maybe you should try to make it more entwined with love and maybe some humor. i liked it. but in the sixth line i think you typed it wrong:

    2 year weekend i have come


    what did you mean by this? i liked what i interpreted from this, it gave me hope that i might have a chance with the girl i like who like's me back. thank you for giving me hope. god bless.


    ~Insphered~
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]


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