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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 238
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1263



    Description:
       things just come to me....so there really is no explanation for this song......
    so just tell me what you think.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsEmpty Page....dots
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    Give me something to believe in
    tell me a story to dream about.
    leave me hope to just dive into.

    sell me all there is in vain & sin.
    make me smile.
    send me hurt.
    train me to live,by giving me betrails.


    Chorus:Draw me away.scetch & retrace.
    im an empty page .
    cut me away.with sharp scissors for pain.
    with marker or pen.
    im just an empty page.
    waiting to be painted on,
    waiting to see what im about.
    what i soon will be...
    im an empty page.


    Let me fly anywhere,
    as the pen does with the paper.
    im,an empty life.
    completely bear,with nothing to hide.

    Let me soar through the lines
    of blue ink meant for a sky.
    like a dove waiting for flight
    nothing else but the color white.
    again make me realize...
    im still,an empty page.

    <<Chorus>>

    Bridge:
    if you make a mistake,
    dont crumple me up.
    Please,just erase.
    i dont wanna be thrown out.
    & if you make a mistake,then i wont be perfect.
    just leave me as i am.
    Thats the way life is ...




    Submitted on 2005-12-15 11:22:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Such talent for 14! I thought this was a great little diddy.
    "waiting to see what I'm about" seems very fitting for the title you've choosen & the age you are...
    This piece flowed beautifully & I look forward to reading more of your pieces. Thanks for the read.
    ~Tonya
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]
      It flowed very well and I just hope the music you put to it is as good as the wording. It was very good indeed. You have quite an ability.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      What kind of tune do ya have in mind for that? I liked it alot. In my head it sounded sort of like an in-betweeny melody... very good write :D
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Aelfled | [ Reply to This ]
      good job good job / i like the word play - it brings alot of cut and slash / i really think its a good write / my testmony: dont think i could sing the song / i'd put a bass solo in the song / other then that keep writing and keep dreaming / my fav line is :
    "tell me a story to dream about." / i love that line!

    Janus
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]



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