"Shadow Box" by Martin S. Allen

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Author:	Martin S. Allen
ASL Info:	33 male
Elite Ratio:	3.98 - 671/222/43
Words:	208

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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"Shadow Box" dots

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Bedtime in cages, alone in my box
Devil may care with reckless abandon
Hopeless happenings with daunted desire
My life as seen from behind these bars
Done with comfort! ill-fated endeavor
The fires of hell bent sadists and sinners

Imprinting the words of this good book
On pages of sorrow and memory cells
Intent on love to give direction
In the captor’s hands, a twisted reflection
Hate for love, good for evil
Sickness for health, a lost connection

Growing tired of life in a box
Thorns and thistles, stones and rocks
Wailing and gnashing of teeth
Cuts and bruises are all I see
A body full of scratches, sickness and scars
Can I see, that this is me?

With testimonies to courts and juries
I hold contempt for fear and fury
Wars they rage within my veins
The blood it flows from day to day
Moving on in body and spirit
My mind remains in this cage
Endless days tied and tattered
Sleepless nights scarred and shattered
What’s the matter?

Submitted on 2005-12-15 13:50:50 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was a random one I picked to read & for your submission I like the lyrical feel and this just hit a personal note with me and my younger brother...we all are the shadow & the light!

Happy Day!

love,peace,joy&smiles to share

tif
| Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  You write very well, I read it aloud and my voice seemed to pick up pace and a fury-
it might mean different things to different people but-
(reading above qoutes)
it dosen't matter the general feeling gets across all barriers.
The one line -
hold contempt for fear and fury
brought to mind shakespear or faulkner...
I don't know why.

| Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW!
| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
  ah, finally, someone who can write! well, there are some others but they are far and few between. and some are just plain crazy! but then what writer isn't a little dysfunctional! I really like this but wonder if you are speaking of a literal or figurative prison, or both? it's quite well done either way. is there a significance to the expansive white space?
| Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
  your writings are powerful.. in many different ways.. i think each person reading them may think of something different.. it's a bit haunting... i most certainly like it.. i think i might stalk you for awhile.. if i can figure out how again
| Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by Justmenow14 | [ Reply to This ]
  I wrote a poem similar to this. It is called 'trapped'. It's about someone who finds themeselves trapped inside their own minds, and nothing else...but they don't understand what is binding them...that it is their own selves that keeps them from their happiness.
The Conqueror
| Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  Good piece. This poem conveys a lot of theories, I'm not even so sure what it's about. It could be anything, and it also could be everything.

It sounds like imprisonment, slavery, or maybe just pure unhappiness. Point blank, it's something miserable.

It could probably even be just what it's called, shadow box. Um. A shadow box dancer who is unhappy and wants out? But at the same time she knows what she has is good, and is wondering why she's ungrateful.

Man. All these problems combined could simply, and straight forwardly just mean insecurities.

I dont know. This has endless possibilites. It's scaring me.

Which is good for you, and bad for me, obviously.

Nice.
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
  THIs was really deep...this speaks volumes to me about drug abuse and just physical abuse in genral...this write was really entracing for some reason...definatly a favorite...though I can't really explain what it is that I like about it the most...maybe it's just the place it took the reader to. keep writing.
peace.
~silent
| Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  I read this a couple of times over and I really like your style and wording on this piece. To me it could have social implication or personal or both.
I really liked, "With testimonies to courts and juries
I hold contempt for fear and fury
Wars they rage within my veins
The blood it flows from day to day
Moving on in body and spirit
My mind remains in this cage
Endless days tied and tattered
Sleepless nights scarred and shattered
What’s the matter?"
You have an original style and I appreciate that too!
Hope all is well!
Love,Peace,Joy~Know,Experience,BE!
tif
| Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a deep poem
If I didnt know better I would swear you where writing this about an addict who has become homeless
I really enjoyed reading this sad write
It sends a message to others to not mess with Drugs
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I read this over & over, because it's the first great piece that I've read since I joined this site.
You probably already know this, but your words are very powerful...
"Wailing and gnashing of teeth"- sounds primative, trapped, dysfunctional as a human being.

I don't really have anything to critique you on, because nothing distracted me from start to end.

And...on the white space...does it mean anything? If it doesn't then, yeah, that bothered me a little....more to scroll down, you know? Hehe.

Scarlett
| Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by ScarlettFever | [ Reply to This ]

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